colinian

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  • Birthday 11/21/1989

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    Writing, cross country skiing, hiking, swimming, computers, listening to music, reading, being a salary man, my spouse Doug.

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  1. Hi Peter... Um... unfortunately, the two "roses" links don't work. The "verdant" one does. Now, "verdant" should certainly be "quoted" because that field needs some truly major tough love! Where I live the fire department sends out people when they find out about a "verdant" field or yard or side-yard. It's one of those "You have 48 hours to clear all of this or we'll send someone to do it and bill you on your property taxes." Sometimes it pays to just let the fire department go ahead and have it done (right) and get billed – which means the cost will be split over the two annual property tax bills (November and April). Anyway, I like the story. I sent the link to my granddad so he can read it. He's 78 and doesn't use a hand mower. He uses a gardening service. Colin
  2. Nickels and Dimes ~ A Short Story by Cole Parker. Can people change for the better? Can they grow after reaching their teen years, and beyond? Is it harder for a teenager or an adult? Featured stories are from our archive and we think you'll enjoy reading them again — or for the first time. The Best of Friends ~ A Short Story - Beginning by Codey - Ending by DesDownUnder. Three friends go on a hike and find something unexpected. Click here to read the hundreds of serial novels, short stories, flash fiction, and poems on the Codey's World site.
  3. Excellent! Colin
  4. I often edit from a printout of my document when I'm near the final draft. The other thing I do is use Natural Reader (version 14) with the voice of Josh, a young-sounding teen because his voice handles story text better than any of the others I've tried. The weirdest thing it does is read out text section breaks like ~~~<>~~~ as "tilde tilde tilde less-than greater-than tilde tilde tilde" which gets really, really old after a while. So, until I post my story I'm using ********** as my temporary section break in my Word documents, which Josh reads as "group of asterisks." Anyway, listening to the story being read lets me discover typos and other kinds of errors I'd missed reading on the computer and from the printed document. Colin
  5. One of the advantages of attending a public school in the USA is freedom of dress (within bounds of decency, of course). Even De La Salle, the local Catholic high school for boys, which has a dress code, lets boys wear long pants or shorts, from the Student - Parent Handbook: Guidelines for pants and shorts 1. The pants are to be solid black or solid khaki/tan pants and are to be full-length cotton twill (not denim or corduroy) with inset pockets. Cargo pants, skinny khaki styles, or pants designed without any inset pockets are not permitted. 2. Pants cannot have flared legs and must be worn at the waist. No low-rise pants will be allowed. 3. Solid khaki or solid black shorts, which can only be purchased in the school store. Colin
  6. It's refreshing to see a story that's set in the present. A good start on what could be a very interesting short story or novel. Colin
  7. I'm too young to have used a typewriter. There's an office in Walnut Creek that has an old Remington typewriter in the window. I'm not too young to (have been forced to) use a pencil to write and rewrite stories — but that was in my creative writing class in eighth grade in middle school, and it made writing a chore. Since then, never again. We brought our own laptops or tablets to my creative writing class in high school (the school had a loaner program if a student couldn't afford to buy they own). Like Cole, the computer is like an extension of my brain, and I can write faster using a keyboard then I was ever able to match writing by hand. Some might say that slower pace using a pencil (or pen) is an advantage; the slower pace allows changes to be made on the fly. I say, good for you, not good for me. A computer makes editing easy. I try to not be tempted to edit along the way; sometimes that's difficult. But it's easy to avoid and then, later, go back and make changes. And I can save pre-edit and post-edit copies. Like Cole wrote, using a computer makes experimentation possible and easy to do. It makes modifications easy to do. Add a character? Change the protagonist's name from Clyde to James? Easier than with a pencil or pen. Rewrite a large part of the story, then decide you don't like that? Easy to do by saving the story under a new name and make all of the changes to that copy. For me, the result is the computer makes writing fun instead of a chore. Colin
  8. Two Friends ~ Chapter 2 of a Novella by Colin Kelly. How many kids meet and become best friends that first day and remain best friends - and more - through the present day, ten years later? Featured stories are from our archive and we think you'll enjoy reading them again — or for the first time. The Best of Friends ~ A Short Story - Beginning by Codey - Ending by Ronyx. Three friends go on a hike and find something unexpected. Click here to read the hundreds of serial novels, short stories, flash fiction, and poems on the Codey's World site.
  9. That image of the rainbow stripe flag covering the street from the bay for so many city blocks is fantastic. How great it would have been to be there that day. Colin
  10. Peter, I agree with Cole. Now is the time to move forward! Colin
  11. A group of us got together and discussed this idea. Doug (he's Chinese) and Mike (he's Japanese) and Ron (he's black) and Chris and Steve (both are white like me). Our opinions were unanimous. Don't change the flag. Both Doug and Mike said the black and brown stripes aren't inclusive for Asians. They think adding a pale yellow-brown stripe would be ridiculous. We agreed with them. Then we wondered, what about transexuals? Shouldn't they have their own stripe, too? Lesbians? Bisexuals? Asexuals? Intrasexuals? Hermaphrodites? We all think adding any stripes to the flag is ridiculous. Like Charlie Brown would say, "Good grief!" Like Ron said, "Stop, already!" That's a good plan. Colin
  12. Hi Peter, I think your suggested revisions to the story are excellent. I've found that I like to let a story "sit on the shelf" for a while, then reread it. It lets me rethink what I wrote. I'm interested in Musings and where you take George and what new characters you add in future chapters. Colin
  13. Hi Peter, I agree with the other comments here. This is a good start. I don't think you need to introduce any new characters in person in this beginning chapter. I hold together to make George a well-rounded character with foibles and faults. There is one thing I'd like to expand on a bit. The end of this chapter, "Life was good", didn't grab me and make me wonder what's going to happen next. Since you're planning this as either a series or interrelated stories or a serial novel, I'd suggest a bit of mystery, a mild cliff-hanger, at the close. Perhaps something like, "Life seemed to be good." Colin
  14. Two Friends ~ Chapter 1 of a Novella by Colin Kelly. How many kids meet and become best friends that first day and remain best friends - and more - through the present day, ten years later? Featured stories are from our archive and we think you'll enjoy reading them again — or for the first time. The Best of Friends ~ A Short Story - Beginning by Codey - Ending by Trab. Three friends go on a hike and find something unexpected. Click here to read the hundreds of serial novels, short stories, flash fiction, and poems on the Codey's World site.
  15. Mr Patterson and the Aide ~ A Short Story by Cole Parker. A man takes a walk in the park, one he’s taken many time before, and his life changes forever... Featured stories are from our archive and we think you'll enjoy reading them again — or for the first time. Buddy ~ A Short Story by Blind Eagle. When your best friend and protector won’t be around after this school year, who’s going to protect you then? Click here to read the hundreds of serial novels, short stories, flash fiction, and poems on the Codey's World site.