Camy Posted January 16, 2019 Report Share Posted January 16, 2019 Homo by Camy (2019) You are getting faint now, my love, you who once shone so brightly - the weft of early dreams, wrapped around the questioning warp of my low esteem. I fucked my hand thinking of you sleeping across the dormitory - the snores, the grunts of others, the soundtrack of my quest. Was I evil... or was I blessed? Swift fumbling moments treasured, stored safely, deep within my mind - our youth, what fun! Lived to the full,a halcyon time, long put to rest. Homo homini lupus est. Link to comment
Cole Parker Posted January 16, 2019 Report Share Posted January 16, 2019 Lovely! Brings back almost memories that weren't mine. C Link to comment
Bruin Fisher Posted January 16, 2019 Report Share Posted January 16, 2019 Lovely wistful poem. Man is wolf to man. Sometimes a man acts like a wolf to another man. So much could be made of that short statement! Could it not be the basis of a story, Camy?!? Link to comment
Pedro Posted January 17, 2019 Report Share Posted January 17, 2019 Wistful memories or maybe wistful memories or wishful thinking. Either way nicely put but I find the final tag leaves me with a feeling of ambiguity of motive in the narrator. Link to comment
Camy Posted January 19, 2019 Author Report Share Posted January 19, 2019 Thanks chaps! You guys and your comments always make me happy! On 1/17/2019 at 9:54 AM, Pedro said: ...I find the final tag leaves me with a feeling of ambiguity of motive in the narrator. The narrator especially thanks the chocolate Lab. I guess you could see it like that. But the poem isn't contemporaneous: it's a once naive narrator's hindsight. And, in hindsight (and with an added 'by') I could truncate it to this: You are getting faint now, my love, you who once shone so brightly -a halcyon time long put to rest by Homo homini lupus est. Link to comment
Merkin Posted January 19, 2019 Report Share Posted January 19, 2019 Lovely poem. (Adding 'by' clears it up for me, Camy. Thanks) Link to comment
Camy Posted January 20, 2019 Author Report Share Posted January 20, 2019 Thankee James. I'm glad the 'by' helped. Link to comment
bi_janus Posted January 23, 2019 Report Share Posted January 23, 2019 I love ambiguity. This is very nice, indeed, Camy. Link to comment
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