Harrod200

A lot of the things to do with where/when/situation etc you remarked on are intentional-I'm writing this from Kris's perspective, and (becoming evident in other chapters), he has no clue about his situation, the date or pretty much any details of himself. For that reason, the reader has NO information that Kris doesn't and everything Kris knows, the reader knows. There are reasons that authority characters are witholding some vital information. Some information is given in early chapters, but there is going to be a trickle throughout the story. There is purposely very little information on him at the beginning, and throughout the story there will be times when he is missing important parts of his history. Regarding the background, i'm currently rebuilding the site in a more lowres-friendly manner so that will be adressed then. I'm taking it that you only read chapter one from your comments? As i want to give the reader only information that Kris knows, and i want to ensure that a lot of information is reserved until later on in the story. After the extra descriptiveness, do you have any suggestions for making it more accessible? The only way i can see would be combining several chapters into one larger chapter, and all this would do is make the time in between publishing future chapters longer. Cheers

Could anyone give me some CC on my story, Krystal at O1 please? Muchos Thankos.