*pete

hey! thatks for all the additional comments. oh and ben- the grammatical errors were done on purpose... it was the journal of a 14-year old boy! LOL im still thinking of writing the story as full-length. i am however, considering dropping the journal-format. i just think it might not work full length- the reader (i assume) will want more descriptive text about the surroundings, the other characters, etc. correct me if i am wrong. also, i think i will leave it more ambiguous. i do want to pretty much end it where it ends currently, adding maybe a little more about the families' reactions... the parents doing the tv-plea for their son, etc. :idea: on another note, the only other thing i have completely written is a screenplay about a rock musician who died and then comes back to reunite with his former bandmates. i think it's pretty good, but im dying to get someone else's opinion. anyone out there who is familiar with screenplays want to check it out? seya! pete

Hey guys! Thanks so much for your feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Here's something I need all your opinions on... I'm considering making "I Love Kevin Bristol" into a full-length story. Do you think it would translate well into full-length in terms of the story itself? If so, should I continue using the journal-entry storytelling style, or write something more traditional? Also, when I originally wrote the story, it had a different ending where the newspaper article was about the two main characters having committed suicide. What do you think about that? I know it's harsh and sad, and that most people like to either see a happy ending or at least something more ambiguous like the way I have it now, but I really personally enjoy stories that aren't always wrapped up with a nice little bow. Personally, I enjoy more realistic stories. Let me know what you think! *pete

Hi everyone! I'm really glad to be part of this community, and hope that I can share as much as I have already learned from all the great writers here. Thanks to both of you who have commented on my story. I always welcome any criticism, good or bad, as any feedback will halp me grow as a writer. Oh, and to underthehoodster... I'm sorry that there was no foot-action there... what WAS I thinking? Writing this story was something new for me. I had written a few short stories in the past (way back in High School... I'm 31 now), a screenplay about aging rock musicians (which has done nothing more than gathering dust on the shelf over my desk) as well as a couple other short stories for the "Nifty" site (more traditional erotica-style), but had this story in my head for wuite some time. I guess I had always wanted to do more writing, but never really thought I had anything to say. Everyone's kind words have really made me feel differently, and made me feel like this is something that I could/should do more often. I'm looking forward to getting to know more of you personally, and reading your stories as well. Thanks again! -Pete