Nickolas James

As the subtitle says, it was the first story I ever wrote. In my profile on my authors page, I mentioned a poorly written first story about how I came out. Well, that's it, and when I say it's poorly written, i wasn't lying. It sucks. Anyway, I really hope that not too many people read it, but if you happen to, please know that it was the very first thing I ever wrote. BTW, the reason it was taken down at Gay Authors was because i had a stalker. Hopefully he doesn't see this topic :)

Just to let everyone know, Camy, Jack Scribe and Little BuddhaTW have all been named Nickolas James Award Winners for the year 2006. Jack Scribe took home 2006 Story of the Year, Camy was named a 2006 Author of the year, and Little BuddhaTW cleaned house, taking home 2006 Cliffhanger of the year, 2006 Most Popular Character of the year and the 2006 Gay Authors Story of the year. On top of that, Awesome Dude won a 2006 Story site of the year award. Congratulations to all of the winners. You can click on the link in my signature for the entire presentation, or you can look in my blog here at AD for a listof all the winners

I think your story has a lot of potential, Kurt, but here's what I'd do.... I'd read it one more time, then I'd go do something else besides sitting at the computer in front of what you just wrote. Then, while your busy, tell yourself the story again. Try to add things to it that you want it to have, and do it so that it's compelling to you. Think about things you can add to it, like small details such as what your mom and dad were doing when you got home. Were they drinking coffee? If so, did the aroma drift into your nostrils? Add small things like that into your plot, and any idea, including a diary entry, can work out well. Good luck, Kurt, and btw, I kinda liked it

Yes....Vic can be a little obsessesive when it comes to Dom

I thought he meant that they were talking about homosexuals killing the serial killers

Thanks for the feedback guys...i will say one thing about this comment I really meant for it to be that way. That's why I called it Recollections But I know what you mean and that's why I came here for help with it. I'd never try to post it anywhere but in a forum like this one or in my own forum at GA, but I'm glad I put it here because I got the honest criticism I wanted. Not that I don't get lots of critisism already.......um, wait, that didn't come out right.

I wouldn't know what you're talking about, Graeme

Yes...feedback is exactly what Im looking for....you probably read it at Codey's World. The reason I postedit here was for some critism. I'm trying to change my style a little bit, and this is my first try at something different from what I normally write. Anyway, thanks for the info and I'll look into what you said...anyone else???

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