DesDownunder Posted October 10, 2006 Report Share Posted October 10, 2006 Poetic Psychosis ? By DesDownunder I wait, It is done. I have done it. I thought about it, I was unsure about it, They said I should try it, I said I would do it. It was something I wanted to do I promised I would do it, And at last I did it. Now I wait And wait Two minutes, And still I wait Waiting for it Should I sit? Or Should I stand? Should I fold my arms? Or clasp my hands? Should I hold my breath? How long have I waited for it? Seems like years, Three minutes, It takes that long to read it, Will they understand it? What if no one sees it? What if no one replies? What will they think? What if they think it is lies? What if they laugh at it? What If they hate it? What if they think I?m a stalker? Or something worse, Like a slack arsed talker. Oh no! Can I get it back? What have I done? I?ve done nothing wrong, I?ll make some tea, Bread some butter, Wash the cat, Feed the dishes. Five minutes have gone by Still no word, No reply, Nothing heard, Why did I try? Am I alone On this planet? Did I scare them all away? Did I spell check it? Is the grammar right? Did I send it? Did it arrive? Six Minutes And counting I?m being silly, I shouldn?t care, It doesn?t matter. I?ll go to bed I can?t sleep, It is too hot. Is that the moon? Or an early sunrise? Did I offend? I?ll delete it, I?ll never write again I?ll sleep on it, And throw away my pen Alarm! Awake! Wood! Computer! Messages! Click! None? Well it?s only been 6 hours, Maybe no one has seen it. I?ll look at the views, Wow! Eight people looked at it. But no reviews. Shower, Clothes, Coffee, Breakfast, Messages. None I?ll ring in sick Not go to work I?ll wait all day, And even pray. Ding ding! A message, Hooray. Oh! It?s just the boss Waiting for me to come in today, He wants to know if I sent in my poem. What reactions did I get? Eight of the best. Edit: inserted missing word Quote Link to comment
Camy Posted October 10, 2006 Report Share Posted October 10, 2006 I'm honestly shocked. I didn't realise you had me under surveillance. Sweet, sweet poem and an alliterate title too, though it could have been longer ... maybe: 'pragmatically psychotic poetically poetic poet.' or not. Did I say I like it a lot. Quote Link to comment
Graeme Posted October 10, 2006 Report Share Posted October 10, 2006 Okay... I have to respond now. What I'm REALLY wondering about is if you've found a way to make the poem dynamic, so the number of views and responses is automatically updated... Nicely done! Quote Link to comment
DesDownunder Posted October 11, 2006 Author Report Share Posted October 11, 2006 Camy, We ar all under surveillance Your proposed title is very funny, and quite accurate. Alliterate? How wonderful. Great word. Graeme, Great minds think alike, -dynamic update the actual number of views. That actually occurred to me whilst I wrote. Too funny. Thanks guys. Quote Link to comment
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