If By Chance - Nickolas James

[Adam Donaldson Powell]

"If By Chance" - by Nickolas James: a great start .. I look forward to the further development!

[Madrigal]

First chapter can be found here.

Enjoy

Maddy

[The Pecman]

Just read the first chapter, and I thought it was very well done. There's definitely a lot of potential in the story, and I congratulate the author to confront a difficult issue -- a lead character who's unable to commit -- and somehow make the character sympathetic and the story entertaining.

I'd suggest it needs more dialogue, though. I think relying on too much prose and description makes the story too objective and not emotional enough. To me, the best fiction has a delicate balance between description and dialogue, but I concede it's a tough tightrope to walk.

[TalonRider]

I know there's a few chapters out now, but when I saw the first draft of chapter 1, it came at a good time. My staff and myself had just gone thru a mandatory session on Harassment at work. So it was fresh in my mind.

As for dialog, it picks up as the story continues.

Nick is also becoming a Master of Misdirection in his stories.

Jan

[Nickolas James]

Sorry for the delay...chapter 15 of If By Chance is up.

Will Judith Mead take advantage of Gerald when Dennis isn't watching? Will Donald Fasola make a pass at Dennis's dad? Will Dennis finally get to drive his own car to the store? Who killed JFK??

Find out the answer to none of these questions and more when you read

Chapter Fifteen of If By Chance.

[TalonRider]

ROFLMAO.

[Bruin Fisher]

A great story so far. A really great story so far. A brilliant story SO FAR.... so naturally I can't reasonably be expected to wait for the next instalment. Patience is not my middle name..

Bruin

[TalonRider]

I'm surprised I didn't get the next chapter. He usually gets them to me on the weekend.

[Nickolas James]

I'm surprised I didn't get the next chapter. He usually gets them to me on the weekend.

It's a trick...I'm going to send it secretly when you least expect it, so that it sneaks up on you. Hopefully while you're holding your brush like a microphone and singing into it in front of the mirror

[TalonRider]

It's a trick...I'm going to send it secretly when you least expect it, so that it sneaks up on you. Hopefully while you're holding your brush like a microphone and singing into it in front of the mirror

I've broken too many mirrors doing that so I had to give it up.

[Nickolas James]

Will Gerald's mother be struck by lightning? Does Dennis own an Al Stewart CD? If so, will he get mad at Gerald for loaning it to a friend? Will Alana be diagnosed with Adult ADHD? Who the hell thinks of these stupid questions?

Find out in chapter 16 of If By Chance.

[Nickolas James]

Sorry for the long chapter draught. Chapter seventeen of If By Chance is now up. Thanks as always to Talonrider for editing, and to all of you, my readers.

Will Gerald take a job serving tables at Red Lobster? Does Dennis have what it takes to bring an out of control 767 out of a nose dive? Can Peter make the conversion from Islam to Devil Worship? Where's Waldo?