Bruin Fisher Posted January 10, 2008 Report Share Posted January 10, 2008 Disclaimer: I don't 'do' poetry. I don't. Not at all. So the following offerings 'just slipped out'. Here's the first, called Radiance. I'm rather proud of it. It was written centuries ago when I was an impressionable teenager, about a girl who could always lift my spirits - and those of everyone else around her. Puddled pavements and sodden clothes Dry out under your smile And showers of your words wash out The gloom, and joy reigns awhile. ... and here's the second, untitled, (it doesn't really deserve one, as you'll see) written in a moment of inspiration, or possibly just mischief. With apologies to the songwriter Jimmy Kennedy. If you go down in the woods today you're sure of a big surprise. If you go down in the woods today you'll find the place full of guys. For every bear that ever there was will gather there for certain because The gays today go cottaging with a picnic! ... so now you know why I'm a non-poet. Bruin Link to comment
Camy Posted January 10, 2008 Report Share Posted January 10, 2008 For someone who doesn't 'do' poetry you 'do' poetry rather well. The first I like a lot, the second (a fairy tale?) made me laugh. Camy Link to comment
DesDownunder Posted January 11, 2008 Report Share Posted January 11, 2008 For someone who doesn't 'do' poetry you 'do' poetry rather well.The first I like a lot, the second (a fairy tale?) made me laugh. Camy My sentiments also Camy. I think Bruin shows quite a poetic flair. I really liked his first one a lot, too. Link to comment
Hylas Posted January 12, 2008 Report Share Posted January 12, 2008 If you go down in the woods today you're sure of a big surprise.If you go down in the woods today you'll find the place full of guys. For every bear that ever there was will gather there for certain because The gays today go cottaging with a picnic! Des and Camy didn't get it. LMAO Check this out And I like the first poem! Link to comment
DesDownunder Posted January 12, 2008 Report Share Posted January 12, 2008 Des and Camy didn't get it. LMAOCheck this out And I like the first poem! Hylas, I did get the variation on the Teddy Bears' Picnic, and thought it quite a humorous adaptation. Just to make certain you know I am familiar with the song, please read the story at my home page at Codey's World. Codey challenged us to finish a story he started, my effort is at, Best of Friends by Codey and Desdownunder. Also you might like to read the other authors' stories who took up the challenge at: http://www.codeysworld.com/anthology/2007-bof/index.html Link to comment
Hylas Posted January 12, 2008 Report Share Posted January 12, 2008 Hylas, I did get the variation on the Teddy Bears' Picnic, and thought it quite a humorous adaptation.Just to make certain you know I am familiar with the song, please read the story at my home page at Codey's World. Codey challenged us to finish a story he started, my effort is at, Best of Friends by Codey and Desdownunder. Also you might like to read the other authors' stories who took up the challenge at: http://www.codeysworld.com/anthology/2007-bof/index.html Sorry! Downloaded for bedtime reading ^^ Okay. Only Camy didn't! EDIT: Okay, I've actually read Codey and Graeme's version before. ^^ But I'll read yours later. :P Link to comment
Hylas Posted January 13, 2008 Report Share Posted January 13, 2008 The second poem was a parody of the children's song "Teddy Bear's Picnic" oops my link is damaged. Direct Link: Link to comment
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