No Good

[Kapitano]

"But why?"

"Because I can't make you happy."

Because I don't care enough to try.

"You already have."

"It wouldn't last."

You're not happy, you're infatuated.

"Have you found someone else? Is that it?"

"No, there's no one else."

But I'm looking.

"Can we still be friends?"

"You're just saying that because you hope we'll get back together, and that would be a bad idea."

We were never friends. I never liked you - I just fancied you.

"But why? Why would it be a bad idea?"

"I'm no good for you."

I'm no good.

[DesDownunder]

This is really good, but I want more.

You could expand this into a short play.

[Cole Parker]

It is too short. It's just getting started and is over. There's much more left to say.

Just my opinion, of course.

C

[Bruin Fisher]

I'm disagreeing(!). I think it's the right length. I like it just the way it is.

[Merkin]

I'd have to disagree also. Like Baby Bear said, for me it's just right. We're left with no doubt of the quality of the relationship and the personalities of the pair. The last line is perfect for the buildup, and too much more would belabor it.

Beyond flash -- its telegraphic.

James Merkin

[Steven Keiths]

I had to read it twice. On my second read, I noticed there were italics used. My vision--far-sightedness-- isn't very good, especially reading print on a monitor.

Perhaps more could be added, but I have to agree it stands quite well as it is written. Very nice piece of FF Kap.

[Cole Parker]

I agree too that it's very well done as is. I hope it wasn't taken I meant that is wasn't. I meant I really enjoyed it and it seemed a premise on which to build a great deal more. It was a great idea, building a story like that.

C

[Jason Rimbaud]

It's kind of ironic, at this moment I'm listening to AD's first podcast, and the song is playing, Son of a Preacher man, and then I read this brilliant, sad flash and I couldn't help but draw parallels.

One hasn't realized it's beyond over while the other is trying to hide his unavailable emotions. How often I've been in this situation, trying to let the other person down gently, lying to make it more human, while all the time just wanting to say the truth and end it like pulling off a band aid.

I likes this muchly

Jason