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You Are So Cold-a TR poem

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You Are So Cold

You are so cold, my Love,

Wherefore art thou so, pray do tell?

Have I not loved you long,

And, have I not loved you well?

Sweet, why the frozen smiles,

Why thus, your snowcapped frosty glare?

Have you ceased to want me,

Dear, do you no longer care?

You gave your beating heart,

Beloved, gave it up to me;

And I have kept it close,

Under kisses, lock and key.

You are my heart?s true love,

You are my hard-won symphony;

There are no words to tell

Just how much you mean to me.

Your icy gaze repels, your

Cold shoulder, a mountain ridge;

Would you look on me more fondly

If I took you from the fridge?

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Interesting poem, TR, very interesting. I think, and you have every right to disagree, that the last word- "fridge" - takes away from the rest of the language used. It is appropriate, and rhyming, but also so much different than the other words. I don't have a suggestion as to what to replace it with, but I figured I would let you know what I thought. Have a nice day.

-N

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Interesting poem, TR, very interesting. I think, and you have every right to disagree, that the last word- "fridge" - takes away from the rest of the language used. It is appropriate, and rhyming, but also so much different than the other words. I don't have a suggestion as to what to replace it with, but I figured I would let you know what I thought. Have a nice day.

-N

Yes, that was deliberate, as part of the 'punchline'.

TR

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