Nick Deverill Posted May 28, 2012 Report Share Posted May 28, 2012 A short story that could be the start of a serial novel as I've talked to Kiwi, the author. Be that as it may, in general I like the short story format, trying to convey a complex idea or ideas in few words. http://iomfats.org/s...b-erickson.html I'm not saying any more, as I'll spoil it for you, but at just over 1000 words (my computer counted them for me), worth a couple of minutes of your time. Quote Link to comment
Guest Dabeagle Posted May 28, 2012 Report Share Posted May 28, 2012 I was less impressed with this first chapter, excepting the twist at the end - it was well hidden, but begged some questions of the lead up. Quote Link to comment
Cole Parker Posted May 29, 2012 Report Share Posted May 29, 2012 Kiwi is an excellent writer. He makes is look easy, always the sign of a master. C Quote Link to comment
Camy Posted May 29, 2012 Report Share Posted May 29, 2012 I thought this worked well as a stand alone short story, and I loved the twist. It could well be the start of a novel, too. Quote Link to comment
colinian Posted May 30, 2012 Report Share Posted May 30, 2012 Cute story. Colin Quote Link to comment
TracyMN Posted May 30, 2012 Report Share Posted May 30, 2012 Saying I didn't see it coming is like saying... well, lets's just say I never see anything coming, and I'm usually no more surprised by it than the morning sun. The full account of my experience, already in the authors hands, is fortunately for you all, full of spoilers. It reads a lot like one of those "near-death experiences" except here, the impact life threatening and only the whole story flashed before my eyes. Seriously, it's like detailed instant replay at the speed of sound. Or light. Whichever's faster. Jump in any time David, I know you're here somewhere. Congratulations on a job well done. Complements here are compliments, indeed. Quote Link to comment
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