Val N Tyne

[Cole Parker]

This approach may be a bit presumptuous and authoritarian -- so sue me -- because someone could or could have put the story directly on Roamin Reader.

Any advice?

I'd suggest, if the First Alert section is to flag promising stories for our attention, and then a story no longer merits that attention, it simply be dropped. If it improves later, it still will contain the poor quality section, and so probably shouldn't be recommened unless those problems are fixed. At that point, after fixing, it'll be a different stroy altogether, and can be treated as one.

C

[Lugnutz]

Just read chapter 15. It's returned to it's former glory of teenage angst and question marks. It's actually pretty good. Read it and form your own opinion.

[Lugnutz]

The latest is up, it will make you forget a couple of the earlier chapters existed. Troubles in paradise in the latest. Give it a read, you'll be surprised.

[dude]

New chapter up today. Story moving along again. This one ends on a cliffhanger...I think the problem that has plagued this story is that it is written by two different individuals. Too many cooks?

[Lugnutz]

Aside from a couple chapters midway thru the series, it was a good story.

This line had me laughing.

"Last one naked has to be the bottom."

[vwl]

Completed. Moving to Roamin' Reader