Nick Deverill Posted October 23, 2013 Report Share Posted October 23, 2013 Another well rounded tale by Altimexis, read it here: http://awesomedude.com/altimexis/Crossroads/XR01-BedBreakfastBoys.html However, a bit of criticism which I hope will be taken the right way, the story as posted has two errors I've found. Early on in the tale with strikeouts and corrections for errors. “Don’t mention it,” she replied. “Seven AM is not so early for me. I usually start me my day at five AM and sometimes even earlier.” "Our ignorance came to a screeching hault halt when we finally opened the door to the master bedroom and waltzed right in, never giving a moment’s thought to whether or not we were alone. It came as an utter shock when our entry was greeted with a pair of screams. Given the normal high standards of this author, his editor and proofreader, I wonder if the wrong version was posted. It is one of those tales that has to be read slowly - perhaps why I found the errors. (Dude - if you want to edit this post and make the corrections, be my guest). Quote Link to comment
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