Nickolas James
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Yeah, well if you can help pay all my bills, I'll have more to contribute. And how much are YOU throwing in??? :)
I was thinking you could get a second or maybe even a third job, working at the petting zoo, and cover it all yourself
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Cheap Bastard. Count me in for $100
Is that all???
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You can't crap on people constantly and expect bouquets of daisies delivered to your door.
Or your inbox??
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Will Gerald's mother be struck by lightning? Does Dennis own an Al Stewart CD? If so, will he get mad at Gerald for loaning it to a friend? Will Alana be diagnosed with Adult ADHD? Who the hell thinks of these stupid questions?
Find out in chapter 16 of If By Chance.
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I'm surprised I didn't get the next chapter. He usually gets them to me on the weekend.
It's a trick...I'm going to send it secretly when you least expect it, so that it sneaks up on you. Hopefully while you're holding your brush like a microphone and singing into it in front of the mirror
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Sorry for the delay...chapter 15 of If By Chance is up.
Will Judith Mead take advantage of Gerald when Dennis isn't watching? Will Donald Fasola make a pass at Dennis's dad? Will Dennis finally get to drive his own car to the store? Who killed JFK??
Find out the answer to none of these questions and more when you read
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I don't think it's fair to base a decision about this site on something that happened at another site. I'd say that if anything, a room to have scheduled Author Chats would be kinda cool, but since I'm not really into chatrooms I'd probably never go into it anyway. (Except to chat with my readers)
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Codey,
Tonight when I look out my window, I'll look for the brightest star because I know that I won't be looking just at a star, but at Heaven's most talented author and poet, shining just as brightly as he shined here on Earth.
To Tim and Codey's family, my thoughts and prayers are still with you.
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And I love you too, my friend.
More than roller coasters??
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I think what I'm going to do is write a whole chapter in third person and see what comes of it. I'll use what I already have as a reference.
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Do you think it would come across better in third person?
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I totally LOVED this story. Of course, it was part of a larger collaboration between Graeme, Yaalc and I over at Gay Authors, but in my honest opinion, this is one of the sweetest short stories I've ever read.
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Your sunset description is 'over the top' and also too scientific at the same time. You would be better off saying 'sun' rather than 'main source of energy and sustenance for our entire planet.' You also say it is incredible to man and woman, then you go on to say only if one is a dreamer.
The child of 2 or 3 or 4 is too vague, and yet you have this same child with intimate knowledge of not only a route driven, but the names of the streets. Very unlikely, unless dad maybe named each street each time he drove anywhere? The song playing being remembered is a bit more plausible, but the band that played it? Again, a bit of a push for me.
In the next paragraph you state the answer, before the implied question as to how you could remember nuances. Link them, or at least have them in the right order.
You seem to making a lot of annecdotes of nothing, and there seems no point to the story. It's just pieces of moderately interesting descriptions.
You reference the imagination of the PEP Boys mechanic, for no discernible reason.
The sentence starting "A couple of days," is awkward, and indeed, doesn't actually convey what I think your point is.
Why do you keep refering to Pep Boys, espcecially irritating when you say you can't remember what you did there with your dad. Why even mention them then?
You state your dad was still part of your life after he was gone, but say you moved away to another town. That seems contradictory.
I think overall you need to look at getting a story line or plot involved. Then some coherence in the way you put down the memories, rather than just flinging them down as they come to mind. Sure, if you suddenly have one, note it down, but scroll over the correct part of the story first.
I hate it when I sound brutal like this, but I would hate to be the editor of this story.
Brutal is good.....this is something in its earliest stages. I haven't even sent a draft to my editor yet. I still have to write the last chapter, then the first one. Either way, I asked for critisism and you gave it. Thanks :)
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Oops, my fault. I missed it.
Jan
I still love you, Jan :)
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Came late to the party...but made it, nonetheless. Just had a chance to read Chapter One and the emotion-packed synoposis of Raymond's earlier family life. Killing off child characters is a tough call, but it is part of life. I say 'eff' the flames. Look forward to continuing the story.
BTW - not to be drippy, but it's Farrah Fawcett, not Faucet.
Jack
Thanks for the compliment, Jack. BTW, you're like the seventh person to tell me that about Farrah Fawcett .
*Ahem* :coughs:-Jan-:coughs:
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Kublai Khan....
Jeez now I have to go back and change all the chapters and short stories to read 'By Kublai Khan' ???
lol....I probably wouldn't do that. I might become the Gay Jedi again
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I liked this little story. It was a perfect little snapshot of a specific place and time, but held resonance for much larger issues in that young man's life. Well done, Nick.
*puts on his editor's visor - you know, the one that's bright red with yellow lettering, and says "Southshore Penguins" on it? yeah, that one - and points out that 'indelibly' does not mean the same as 'inevitably.' *
cheers!
aj
lol....I know but it sounds a lot fancier
Thanks for the comment, aj :)
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It is a very different story than that normally found when looking for gay fiction, and even more remarkable when you consider that the story was written by a teenager. While I might have a few minor problems with the story, overall I was very impressed. It really came over as having been written by someone in their sixties.
Well, I have to admit that I had some pretty good beta readers
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All the while I was reading this story, I kept waiting for the gratuitous gay sex, and it was not forthcoming. Instead I read a story of love, uncertainty, forgiveness, and pain. I read about consequences of a careless act, and avoiding telling the truth. I read a remarkable story. Thank-you Nickolas.
Thanks Trab. I was really nervous about writing a story like this, so it makes me feel good to get positive feedback. Chapter one got me more flames in one week than all of the flames I'd ever gotten combined since I first started writing.
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As the subtitle says, it was the first story I ever wrote. In my profile on my authors page, I mentioned a poorly written first story about how I came out. Well, that's it, and when I say it's poorly written, i wasn't lying. It sucks. Anyway, I really hope that not too many people read it, but if you happen to, please know that it was the very first thing I ever wrote.
BTW, the reason it was taken down at Gay Authors was because i had a stalker. Hopefully he doesn't see this topic :)
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Just to let everyone know, Camy, Jack Scribe and Little BuddhaTW have all been named Nickolas James Award Winners for the year 2006. Jack Scribe took home 2006 Story of the Year, Camy was named a 2006 Author of the year, and Little BuddhaTW cleaned house, taking home 2006 Cliffhanger of the year, 2006 Most Popular Character of the year and the 2006 Gay Authors Story of the year.
On top of that, Awesome Dude won a 2006 Story site of the year award. Congratulations to all of the winners. You can click on the link in my signature for the entire presentation, or you can look in my blog here at AD for a listof all the winners
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I think your story has a lot of potential, Kurt, but here's what I'd do....
I'd read it one more time, then I'd go do something else besides sitting at the computer in front of what you just wrote. Then, while your busy, tell yourself the story again. Try to add things to it that you want it to have, and do it so that it's compelling to you. Think about things you can add to it, like small details such as what your mom and dad were doing when you got home. Were they drinking coffee? If so, did the aroma drift into your nostrils? Add small things like that into your plot, and any idea, including a diary entry, can work out well. Good luck, Kurt, and btw, I kinda liked it
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Yes....Vic can be a little obsessesive when it comes to Dom
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I have to say that I hear the word faggot out in public about 100 times more often than at school. As far as the phrase "that's so gay" goes, I admit to being just as guilty as anyone else. I also call a lot of my friends "gaylord." It's not that big of a deal to me, and I'm out, so people pretty much know I don't mean it in a homophobic way.
I think the bigger problem is the way we accept gay jokes being cracked on TV shows like Letterman and Leno, or even on South Park.