Hi Guys -
I have to agree with Blue at this point in the story. From a technical aspect, it is well-written, and although rushed in places, the characters are takiing shape. Though two similarly-named characters is not a good thing, I have decided. It is WAY too confusing, at least in this context.
I confess that Dude's comment re cliches did make me think back over the story, and it is weak at times. But cliches exist for a reason - certain "issues" or patterns come up repeatedly in one's life or tend to come up at sometime in everybody's kife. So, their inclusion doesn't bother me much, assuming that the author does not overuse them, and can be creative while doing so.
FWIW, I would keep an eye on the story and see how the next few chapters go. Odd/unique/off-the-wall/HUH? styled titles for stories often lead me to new finds. This is one of those stories, as were Tristan's Redemption, What Lies Within, Alone by Myself, uhm <sadly watches several grand examples float off into the night air without identifying themselves.> and others <who will be caught and posted.> I feel that like a parent, an author that takes special care naming his/her "child" usually takes more care in writng as a whole.
May I suggest another at which to take a look ? It would be too early to say for sure, but the characters have potential, as do the story elements. I'm enjoying it so far. It is posting on Nifty in High School - "Goo-Goo-Muck" (like I said about titles.)
CAVEAT: I'm not sure about how to define the sex content, but it is there, albeit in the form of day-dreaming sequences I guess would be the term.
RP