Hi everyone
I was told to join in the forams so here goes.
Several years ago I attenpted to take a writing course but found it ever so dull, so I tried another tack and joined several Yahoo writing groups. They were a mixed bag of amatures and experts whose only aim was to lead new writers into enjoying their craft. Imagine my surprise to find that the kind of prose modern publishers required was not like the books of the fifties and sixties. Gone were the formal and stilted passages with whole pages of discriptive passagers. One of the first new rules was to get rid of He said, she said and most words endng in ly. At frst my reaction to critiscs pulling my my beloved El Tigre to pieces was 'How dare they'. But then I tried it their way and eventually managed to cut out almost a quarter of the words in the book, which was a good thing to do when working towards pleasing a publisher with a budget to keep. All it took was the turning of sentences around
Take for instance, "I don't think we ought to critisise other people's work," Robert said angrily as he threw the manuscript down on the table. 22 words
Robert threw the manuscript down on the table. "I don't think we ought to critisise other people's work." 18 words
Putting the action in front of the dialogue tells the readeres who is speaking and so makes he said unnessessary.
I get annoyed when I have to read the whole of the dialogue to find out who is speaking.
This way also rids the sentence of the word angrily, as the reader knows from his action that Robert is angry. Why waste words?
The Cup Bearer was originally 900 A4 pages long before I used these rules and othersI learned about.
Dorothy