untouchable

[Guest Rustic Monk]

untouchable

gabriel duncan

you think you're so superior

the way you think you excersize your intellect

you think you're pretty smart

how concisely you reject

you think it's someone else's turn

to feel the burn

from being spurned

you think it's someone else's turn

to see their love

unreturned

you think you're so great

how you never hesitate

to take the things you want

you think you're so awesome

and you prove it when you flaunt

you think you're untouchable

that you're on a level

unreachable by someone

as small and lowely as I

you think you're untouchable

that's why you wear a disguise

deep down inside

it's not why you hide

.

[Guest Rustic Monk]

this one actually means a lot. this one is directly based on that voice mail I got. i addressed both of these poems (you're so bold and untouchable) to myself, really. it's kind of exposing.

[Jason Rimbaud]

Hey Gabe,

This is really good...undisguised anger that's barely controlled with a healthy dose of contempt. You mentioned something

about a voice message you received, and this was your retort.

My question: Are you the protagonist or is it the person leaving the voice message to you?

This is brilliant work...I likes it

Jason

[Guest Rustic Monk]

both of the poems were based on what was sent to me.

so, yeah. i'm attacking myself, really.

[Jason Rimbaud]

I always loved poetry that strips the writer bare and lays it all for the world to see. If I had a seal of approval, like Des Down Under, I would give it freely.

Jason