Guest Rustic Monk Posted March 26, 2008 Report Share Posted March 26, 2008 untouchable gabriel duncan you think you're so superior the way you think you excersize your intellect you think you're pretty smart how concisely you reject you think it's someone else's turn to feel the burn from being spurned you think it's someone else's turn to see their love unreturned you think you're so great how you never hesitate to take the things you want you think you're so awesome and you prove it when you flaunt you think you're untouchable that you're on a level unreachable by someone as small and lowely as I you think you're untouchable that's why you wear a disguise deep down inside it's not why you hide . Quote Link to comment
Guest Rustic Monk Posted March 26, 2008 Report Share Posted March 26, 2008 this one actually means a lot. this one is directly based on that voice mail I got. i addressed both of these poems (you're so bold and untouchable) to myself, really. it's kind of exposing. Quote Link to comment
Jason Rimbaud Posted April 4, 2008 Report Share Posted April 4, 2008 Hey Gabe, This is really good...undisguised anger that's barely controlled with a healthy dose of contempt. You mentioned something about a voice message you received, and this was your retort. My question: Are you the protagonist or is it the person leaving the voice message to you? This is brilliant work...I likes it Jason Quote Link to comment
Guest Rustic Monk Posted April 4, 2008 Report Share Posted April 4, 2008 both of the poems were based on what was sent to me. so, yeah. i'm attacking myself, really. Quote Link to comment
Jason Rimbaud Posted April 9, 2008 Report Share Posted April 9, 2008 I always loved poetry that strips the writer bare and lays it all for the world to see. If I had a seal of approval, like Des Down Under, I would give it freely. Jason Quote Link to comment
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