Guest Dabeagle Posted April 20, 2011 Report Share Posted April 20, 2011 I've recently read all four posted chapters and had a few thoughts to share. Like most stories, this one isn't for everyone. The diction is so out of step with modern speech and occasionally I find periods where I'd have thought of a comma or no punctuation in a sentence where I'd have expected one. The flow, indeed the feel, of the story is right though and must be very very difficult to achieve. I can't imagine putting such old fashioned, period language together successfully and consistently, add to that the primitive plumbing and the overall unusuallness of the idea (to me) of a boarding school make this something other than the run of the mill tale. Historical fiction can be a quagmire, since there are so many well known events. This may not suffer from that due to the encapsulated nature of the location. I'd have to look up the time period to see if there were major conflicts that brewed up and would be part of such a storyline, but as it stands the day to day has tons of detail. This is clearly a large effort, I look forward to future chapters. Quote Link to comment
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