3 Poems

[TalonRider]

While visiting my brother and his family for Christmas, I had the opportunity to read some poems written by my 13 y/o nephew. With his permission, I am going to share three of them with you. These were done for an assignment in school.

When The Fog Rolls In

By Alex

When the fogs rolls in,

You can?t see anything,

No trees,

No houses,

No anything,

But when it rolls out,

It was like nothing has happened,

You could see everything,

But on this day something has happened,

Something went missing,

No trace,

Something very important,

My dogs were gone,

some people say that they could hear faint barks at night,

When the fog rolls in.

Reflection: it was an idea that came to my head during when I was asleep. I thought it would make a good poem.

About How I Miss You

By Alex

How I loved you I didn?t know,

How you would bake cookies with me,

Play outside,

Or just sit and talk,

I would help you with your puzzles,

How we would stay up late and watch T.V,

As I grew up,

I started to know the past,

How you did many great things,

You were brave,

And never gave up,

I have very happy time with you,

And very bad,

But when you were gone,

I started to show my love for you,

There will never be enough times to say good bye,

I wrote this poem for you,

To show you how I love you,

I know you won?t see it,

But I know you would like it,

And give me a big hug.

Reflection: I wrote it so I could remember my grandpa and what he did for me.

Life Is??

By Alex

Life is an undiscovered galaxy,

That there?s so much to find,

So much to discover,

You find new things,

Planets, stars, maybe new life forms,

That is so big,

There?s always something to find,

But you can only go so far,

So far,

You will never be able

To find everything.

Reflections: I wrote it because life is a undiscovered galaxy. Finding new things every day.

[Guest rusticmonk86]

Humm . . . . As a collection, I like it.

Keep writing.

[Codey]

Very good Alex, I especially liked "About How I Miss You"

I agree with Gabe, keep writing.

Codey

[TalonRider]

Alex Thanks You 8) for your comments.

Jan

[blue]

I liked each of them.

The fog poem has a little mystery and some imagery. All that fuzzy fog, very nicely done.

The poem on missing grandpa, yup, I know the feeling, and you caught that really well.

The life / galaxy poem has what's called the "sense of wonder" in science fiction, the curiosity and interest in what's new and different, eagerness to learn. Don't ever lose that. -- Hmm, we may not be able to see and do everything, but there's more we can reach than most of us realize, and reaching for it is a goal in itself.

Keep writing, Alex, in poetry and prose. You already have a talent for it, and writing more will grow that talent. Good job.

[TalonRider]

If anyone is interested, I've posted these 3 and 4 others at The Talon House.

http://thetalon.ipbhost.com/index.php?showtopic=2979

Jan

[Guest rusticmonk86]

Thanks for keeping us updated, Jan.

Happy (calender) New Year