Chris James Posted April 30, 2012 Report Share Posted April 30, 2012 I deem short stories like this to be the most difficult pieces for an author to write, especially one so young. I think it is wonderful that the Dude chose to post this work and give us a glimpse of a new author, even if the story is but a diamond in the rough. Richard Brown seems to have poured his heart out on the page and gives the reader much to think about. If this is a first effort then he has done well to present characters in conflict and give us an intense story line that ends too soon. Much of the discussion among AD authors is about what keeps the readers focus and I think Richard has done a good job there. The story begins and ends with violent thoughts, and yet I feel there may be more truth in Richard's prose than fiction, and that would be unfortunate. But authors who write about the world around them leave their characters well grounded and believeable. The story ends abruptly, as if Richard was shutting off the thoughts that possessed him to write in the first place. I would hope we all reach out and encourage Richard to write more stories. He needs the chance to expand his thoughts beyond the short story category. Given time, and a good editor, I can see Richard developing his writing skills and using the stories as an outlet for his emotions. Rainbow town and Jesus land is an interesting choice for a title, although the story did not give us much of a chance to understand why he named in this fashion. If this was submitted for a school competition then I think that took some courage considering the subject matter. I would like to see more from this young man. Thank you, Richard. Quote Link to comment
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