Rutabaga Posted May 19, 2015 Report Share Posted May 19, 2015 I looked high and low for a previous thread on this story and couldn't find one. So now that it's a Dude's Pick it seems high time. It's an engaging story even as it treads some well-worn paths. I'm especially impressed as it was apparently a first effort, if I understand an earlier post correctly. My main complaint is the very one that was the subject of this 2008 series of posts: forums.awesomedude.com/index.php?showtopic=3254. Personally I found the ever-shifting POV to be very distracting. Thank heavens, at least, that we didn't also have the internal thoughts of Kevin (which would have essentially removed the story from the story. We actually have kind of a blend between multiple third-person POVs and an additional omniscient POV where the author makes observations and pronouncements about the thoughts and insights of the POV characters. I realize that this is partially a matter of taste and partially a matter of cultural conditioning. In the 19th century it was common for authors such as Dickens to inject their omniscient personal observations throughout a novel. In contemporary times, this is done much more sparingly, if at all. Similarly, at least in any given scene, the contemporary view is to stick faithfully to one POV, and to let the reader discern (or not) what may be going on in the heads of the other characters on the same footing as the POV character. I know there have been many discussions here about the pluses and minuses of multiple POVs, whether they are announced by naming the character at the beginning of a section (something I deplore) or simply by having one character think and say something followed immediately by a description of what the other character(s) think about that statement. I'm more used to looking for clues about the other character(s)'s reaction rather than simply having it announced to me. But I agree with the observation that having written something that people are reading is a major achievement. Cory is a very likeable and engaging character, and the reader is rooting for him all the way. That is a good thing. R Quote Link to comment
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