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measure of love

you ask me if I love you

you measure each embrace

weigh my words against your past

distrust my smiling face

examine close each offering

for motive and intent

parse apart my lines of love

and ask me what I meant

you price each loving present

you bite to test my coin

you question all my kisses

hold back when we conjoin

I wonder if you see me

or hear the sounds I speak

love is dying on the vine

ill nourished by critique

why can?t you simply swallow

the sweets I feed to you

distrust is hard and hollow

love?s easier to chew

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Hi TR,

I found both your poems, Honeysuckle and measure of love, not only well written with depth and meaning, but also stirring long lost memories of my youth. I really liked them both.

Thank you.

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Guest Gabriel Duncan

I like this the best out of honeysuckle and artwork. This is really good. It's no overdramatic or contrived. Non-rhyming couplets . . . . Well, I think contrived is a bad word. Even though it's what I meant. For interpertation purposes "distant" would be better.

The point that I wanted to make was: THIS has feeling. And I like it.

But the last line irked me. Because, it doesn't have the same amount of beats that the other verses had.

I totally empathise with this.

i also wanted to point out the last verse has the only contractions in the whole poem.

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I like this the best out of honeysuckle and artwork. This is really good. It's no overdramatic or contrived. Non-rhyming couplets . . . . Well, I think contrived is a bad word. Even though it's what I meant. For interpertation purposes "distant" would be better.

Well, the stanzas are rhyming but thanks for saying they don't seem contrived. I contrived hard for that very effect. :icon8:

The point that I wanted to make was: THIS has feeling. And I like it.

Thanks! Praise from on high...(and highly qualified, lol)

But the last line irked me. Because, it doesn't have the same amount of beats that the other verses had.

Um, as far as I know, the last line of each stanza has six beats. :icon8:

I totally empathise with this.

Again, thanks, Gabe! :icon1:

i also wanted to point out the last verse has the only contractions in the whole poem.

Okay...you don't like contractions? I use contractions sometimes to give lines a more natural feel or flow, and they do often come at the end of a poem, or at least at the end of an idea.

Thanks for the comments, I liked this poem best from yesterday, too, though I don't think it's my best effort. It does come from experience, though I've been on both sides of that behavior. My current beaux doesn't do this, thank goodness. In large quantities, it can cause gastric distress, aside from killing off the very love it tries to measure.

Kisses...

TR

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