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Yes, much more, in fact, than a theme to explore, but on that note: I was encouraging Gabe to write more on the subject. How can we know what is happening if nobody tells us? How many of you knew of this situation before reading the piece? Write-on Gabe! You did a great job and I wish you to write more on this subject if it does not pain you too much. Hope the person in the accident is all right. ++Naiilo

Thanks. Thanks for editing all of the stories we read, and the ones we don't. You guys are important to the writing process. Happy holidays. ++Naiilo P.S. You non-editors out there, yeah -- you -- you know who you are... you should thank these guys too because without them those weekly chapters might be bi-weekly chapters, or littered with rubbish and misspellings.

First, I'd like to wish you all a very politically correct Happy Holidays. Second, I'd like to thank you for your writings and thoughts. They are so interesting to read. While I do not know you all personally, one can gain so much information about another through their writings. Thank you. To all of you out there who haven't thanked your favorite authors, feel free to thanks them here. ++Naiilo, the college student that can't communicate nice things for beans.

Gabe, I read it. Your story contains some powerful themes and images. Perhaps you should explore this more? +Naiilo

I'm not an 'editor', but as far as clarity is concerned your sentence is fine. It is not a sentence that can be used outside of an appropriate context, but the word 'one' in the sentence refrences back to the last noun, 'game', making the sentence clear. You are writing for an english-speaking audience, most of whom will know the meaning of the sentence and that 'one' refers to the number of games you are ahead. I think the problem with adjusting a sentence like this is that you have to view it in context. If the sentence is isolated it is not clear on any level. -Naiilo PS- I think that my message is clear, but if it isn't I'm sure there is someone that can figure it out, right?

Heh, right now I'm in trouble with my guy... so I'm living with Snoopy right now (as in: in the dog-house). I hope that maybe going to carmina tonight helped with it all. Carmina Burana is wonderful live if you've never heard it live. -Naiilo the scariest thing is the 10 page feature i have to write by monday... on parenting... dun-dun dun-dun duhhhhnnnnn. P.S.- thanks for the tips.

It is dead week and finals week here at uni. Not the most fun. Any tips for keeping stress down other than drinking, drugs, meditation, and sleep? -Naiilo

This picture is very reminiscent of Rocky. That's what I thought of when I first saw it. Rocky Horror or Rocky Balboa? -Naiilo

Well, I don't necessarily want to edit professionally, but I do perform a lot of editing here at uni for my fellow students. Most of what I do is content and style editing. For proofing, I expect my peers to be apt enough to proof their own work unless they ask me to. I'm damned picky, especially with diction and syntax. Because of the editing I've done for others, my own writing has improved greatly. Right now I am working on my creative skills when I have the time. Probably gonna work on my current project tonight some. -Naiilo

1) Forgot about it... People I meet online are like spirits to me, they do not have a form to remember. 2) I am off again soon from school. I hope I will be able to then. I wanted to give you something for Halloween, but I was unable to. -Naiilo

Referring to the photos or the hot guy who originally made the post? :) Considering the topic of this thread, and the fact that I have never seen RM before, the answer to your question should be obvious. Seeing as your dirty mind will not make the logic jump without some sort of jack-off fantasy involved I will be more frank. I believe that RM's photography, located at http://www.lonelyocean.co.uk/photography.htm looks good; as in his photographs are visually pleasing, in my amateur opinion composed well, and given the opportunity to encourage him, I did. If this response is not enough to stray you from such thoughts as those displayed above, please let me know and I will clarify further. -Naiilo

These responses are interteresting to read. Proofing is an important part of the writing process, but I have never considered it part of editing. Editing, in my view, focuses on content and style. very interesting... -N

Looks good. -Naiilo

My dad works as a broker for a large truking company and keeps trying to get me to be a dispatcher for some place here in town. I bet I know which books you are talking about. Ugh, too many codes, no? -N

:oops: Thanks! :D I agree, Double-Plus Good! -Naiilo

It's good, read it. I like Gabe's style, and wish he'd take my advice about trying out freelance-submission writing. -Naiilo

I haven't looked into it, and I really have a lot of other stuff to do right now, so I want to ask: "Are most of the recent gay or homosexual-male novels young-adult, or teenage level? If not, are there any well written ones that you might recommend, other than those online?" -Naiilo

I like TR's jokes. -Naiilo

Hey: all you out there! I've been thinking a lot about editing this fall, and done a little digging. And now I have a question for each of you 'editors' out there: ++Would the 'editing' you perform lean more toward content editing, stylistic editing, proofing, or layout/design editing? Make sure to think about this one! Okie dokie! Get back to me on this, and maybe we'll get a decent convo out of it, eh? -Naiilo

What is "from of cheese"? Or do you mean "fond of cheese" -- that would be Wallace from Wallace and Grommit. I like Grommit better than Wallace. And Grommit doesn't say a word. See -- this is a good example of what I was talking about. WBMS is evoking one of his noticeable character quirks: his inability to not correct another in conversation. It fits in well with his grammarian tendancies and language-usage pet peeve. I do appreciate his effort, though, to highlight my characteristic quirk, which is an inability to actually type the right word in a forum post, and also for the opportunity to create an example for my original idea. We are memorable characters on this forum thanks to our characteristic quirks/flaws, at least for now. Double-Plus Good: Yes, Grommit is a better character than Wallace in my opinion too. -Naiilo

I haven't been able to do much writing this fall, but I have done a lot of reading, most of which is for classes. For my writing class we had to read some writer's periodicals. I snatched up a Writer's Digest, Writer's Market, and The Writer. Now, I don't remember if it was in The Writer or Writer's Digest, but one of those mags had an article on creating memorable characters. One aspect in particular stood out to me. I can't quote it, but if I remember right they said that memorable characters always contain some sort of noticible flaw, or quirk. So say you have a main character that is incredibly clumsy, or particularly from of cheese. Those characters stick out to readers in different audiences. I doubt endowing your characters with quirks/flaws that are more generalized will turn off an entire sector of readership. I don't know... it sounds like a neat idea to experiment with. -Naiilo

Somewhere along my education, I remember a "Laika" from slavic mythology, not that I remember where to look anymore... Good job EleCivil. -N

Oh, I remember that one now. Outside of it's poetic home it really is a creepy line. I had figured it wasn't serial killerish, but it added to the creepiness. I suppose that I, too, shall have to post something halloween themed on here soon. -N

it's interesting that you use "hearth" though, TR. "Would chill my flesh and warm my hearth" that line is particularly chilling because of your choice of "hearth" over "heart". It is because of the verbal implications from the line. "Would" is a homonym with "wood". As we all know wood is used in a hearth as fuel for fire. Your diction creates a peculiar line. If just by itself it makes for a hauntingly 'serial-killer' tone. It sounds like maybe the speaker is suggeting they burn dead bodies in the hearth to make them warm. Sometimes we say in english that something warms us, as in it brings us joy. In this case the line would suggest that burning cold bodies in a hearth brings joy to the speaker. he-he, just a little over-analysis for you. i thought it might put everyone in the creepy halloween spirit. -Naiilo PS - please dont be mad at me TR :)

This sounds like a march... -Naiilo