Jason Rimbaud Posted July 9, 2008 Report Share Posted July 9, 2008 A Disturbing Phone Call By: Jason Rimbaud ?Hello? ?Hi, baby.? Smiling, Justin replied, ?Mom, how are you?? ?I?m fine, how you holding up?? ?A bit tired, but I?m used to that.? ?Are you eating properly?? ?I just ate breakfast,? Justin said, adding, ?How?s everyone there?? ?Everyone went sailing with your dad.? Regretting the time away from his family, Justin sighed as his mother added, ?Sarah called.? ?Yeah.? He replied hesitantly. ?She wants her ring back.? Looking over at his dresser, he said, ?I?ll send it off today.? Sitting on the chair, Justin said, ?I wish she called me instead of you.? ?She?s a bit pissed at you at the moment.? ?I can?t blame her for that.? ?No you can?t. We had a long talk.? She added, ?I love you, and it?s your decision but you really need to talk to her.? Justin replied through a sigh, ?I can?t...not yet. ?Are you sure you don?t want to tell me what happened?? ?One day, but not yet,? Justin said. ?Just remember I?m always here.? ?Thanks.? Justin hung up the phone and wiped the tears away. How could he tell his mom the truth? She so wanted grandkids; it would break her heart. He looked in the mirror, ?I?m gay.? Link to comment
Bruin Fisher Posted July 9, 2008 Report Share Posted July 9, 2008 Lovely Jason! Lump-to-your-throat beautiful. Bruin Link to comment
Jason Rimbaud Posted July 9, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 9, 2008 Now if only I could write something longer than two hundred words. Though I do have several other flash fiction shorts starring these characters, I can't seem to link them together for something longer. Thanks Bruin, Jason Link to comment
Camy Posted July 9, 2008 Report Share Posted July 9, 2008 Great stuff, Jason. I read it filmically* - was directing the action! As for not managing to write a longer piece with the characters ... Twaddle! It'll come in time (no, that's not a double entendre either ). Why not try writing it as a script? Camy * is there such a word? Link to comment
colinian Posted July 10, 2008 Report Share Posted July 10, 2008 I loved this story when I first read it, and it's even better when I read it again. Colin Link to comment
Richard Norway Posted August 4, 2008 Report Share Posted August 4, 2008 I first read this on a different website. I cried then. I just found this again on AD. I cried just now...again. Keep your passion Jason. The longer stories will happen. I'm still working on my longer pieces, and mine will happen too. Richard Link to comment
Jason Rimbaud Posted August 4, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 4, 2008 Great stuff, Jason. I read it filmically* - was directing the action! As for not managing to write a longer piece with the characters ... Twaddle! It'll come in time (no, that's not a double entendre either ). Why not try writing it as a script? Camy * is there such a word? Believe it or not Camy, I've always wanted to direct a film or at best a short art film. Each time I write a story, I tend to visualize it on a big screen, the actors, the dialog, the settings...so Twaddle away you crazy Emu... J I loved this story when I first read it, and it's even better when I read it again.Colin Thanks my fellow poet, J I first read this on a different website. I cried then.I just found this again on AD. I cried just now...again. Keep your passion Jason. The longer stories will happen. I'm still working on my longer pieces, and mine will happen too. Richard Richard--how cool is that. My first time making someone cry. WOOT! Seriously, thanks for commenting. Jason Link to comment
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