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Here's the first chapter of "A Geek Grows Up". I've got most of Chapter 2 written, and an outline for a total of 8. Chapter 1 is 5,500 words long and I would appreciate criticism from anyone. Some things that worry me:

  • Weird New Zealand English that sticks out? (ie: use of NZ slang like wank & poofter, rather than north-american equivalents jerk-off and faggot)
  • Terrible chapter ending cliff-hanger?
  • Too much sex for AwsomeDude?

A Geek Grows Up - Chapter I

Brotherly Adventures

"Hey....are you two going to stay in there all afternoon or what?"

asked Stephen as he barged into his older brother James' bedroom

unannounced. As soon as he did it, Stephen realised he should have


James' friend Andrew was sitting on the bed, his jeans down round

his ankles, a porn magazine open to the centerfold, stroking his hard

cock. Andrew was staring at James who was standing next to his

friend, rubbing his own hard cock through his jeans. If he had wanted

to Andrew could have stuck his tongue out and licked the back of the

hand that was gently rubbing at James' bulge; and judging by the

look on Andrew's face, that was exactly what was about to happen.

"Get out!!!" shouted James, as he used his muscular 6ft 3in frame to

bundle Stephen out into the hallway; firmly closing the door behind


"What are you two doing?" Stephen asked, rather needlessly.

"What does it look like? Not a word to anyone" hissed James

menacingly into Stephen's ear as he shunted his younger brother across

the passage and into his own bedroom.

Shaken a little by the violence of James' reaction, Stephen paused to

consider what he'd just seen: Andrew's 6in cut cock dripping precum

onto the open porno magazine; meanwhile Andrew was completely

ignoring the naked female beauty in the magazine; rather he was

staring at the tantalisingly large bulge that Stephen himself had just

felt pressed against his ass cheeks as he had been bundled out of the


Like any horny 16 year-old boy, Stephen had often wondered how big his

older brother was. Unfortunately he hadn't seen or felt enough to be

able to judge his brother's cock size, but he had got a proper look at

Andrew's fine cock. Even more, Stephen wondered what the two 18 year

olds were getting up to now.

Stephen considered sneaking back to listen at the door, but the

rapidly growing bulge in his own jeans grabbed his attention. His 5in

uncut cock was straining for release so he looked over his shoulder to

check the door was closed, pulled his tee shirt out of his jeans and

undid the belt and the big button. He got comfortable on his bed, his

jeans and dark gray briefs down round his ankles. Taking his cock in

his right hand, he peeled back his foreskin, exposing the precum

covered dark purple head. The smell of precum wafted up to his

nostrils, as he scooped the precum goo up with his finger, he bought

it up to his nose, and took a deep sniff.

"Uuuuuuunnnnnggghhhhh..." he moaned softly and licked his finger


Stephen wrapped his right hand around his thickening shaft, and started

peeling his foreskin back and forth. The fleeting glimpse of Andrew's

cock, the feel of his brother's bulge rubbing against his ass, the

thought of what those two were doing right now in James' bedroom

soon had Stephen grunting in pleasure.


He knew he was close, he just needed to reach under his teeshirt with

his left hand, grab hold of his nipple, and give it a pinch and a


The familiar churning began in his balls, Stephen's legs locked almost

painfully straight; his hips started an involuntary thrusting motion

as he pulled his foreskin as far down the shaft of his cock as was

comfortable and let go:

"Uuuuuunnngggghhhhhhh...." he grunted as the first volley of hot

teenage cum shot out of his cock, splattering on his face.

"Unnnnnnnnnnngggghhhhhhhh....", the second volley landed plop on his

teeshirt. After the third blast, his hips stopped thrusting, he

started rubbing his foreskin back & forth, milking more goo from his

cock, smearing it on his stomach. His breathing returned to normal and

the attention he was giving his now sensitive cock-head sent shivers

up his spine.

* * * * *

The next afternoon, Stephen was fooling around on the family computer

in the dining room. James came in and said "Hi".

"Uhhh.....hi", replied Stephen defensively, James wasn't often this nice

to his geek younger brother.

"I was wondering what you saw yesterday, when you came into my room

unannounced like that"

"Uhhhh yeah .... sorry about that.... I should've knocked"

"So what did you see?" asked James again.

"Uhhh Andrew had one of Dad's porno magazines, and he had his cock


"Ohhh.....so you saw then?" James said, looking worried.

"Yep, it looked like you two were having fun" replied Stephen. "What

happened after I interrupted?"

"Well Andrew was pretty close when you walked in, he just kept going

and shot a load while I was hustling you out."

"Yeah, sorry.....I know I should've knocked....".

"You aren't going to tell Mum & Dad we were wanking off with one of

Dad's magazines are you?" James asked.

"No need, he already knows we swipe them to have a wank with", replied

Stephen with a cheeky grin on his face.

"Not that!" snapped James "...but that I was doing it with Andrew"

"Ahhhhh so that's what you're worried about"

"Uhhh yeah, kinda" replied James, nervously.

"Why? what were you doing? Do you guys wank off together often? Have

you been doing it long? " Stephen's curiosity was about to get him into


"Uhhh...a few times" James answered the easiest question, not wanting

to let on just how involved he was with Andrew.

After a moment of uncomfortable silence Stephen asked "So do you hold

each other's cocks?"

"Uhh yeah we do" James mumbled, getting embarrassed.

"No way!!! What's it like having another guy touch your cock? Do you

shoot while he's holding it?" each answer led to more questions from

Stephen. James was regreting he'd raised the subject, but he had to be

sure Stephen wasn't going to tell.

"Why don't I show you?" James asked, hoping he could guarantee

Stephen's silence by trapping him in the same activity.

"Uhhh... uummmm..." Stephen was getting nervous.

"Go on....it's fun...you'll like it...and it's the only way you'll

find out what it's really like" James moved closer to his younger

brother and reached for his crotch.

"Go on...drag it out man...I'll give you a wank" James promised as he

placed his large hand on Stephen's bulge.

Stephen stood in an attempt to escape but his rapidly growing cock

betrayed his interest in his brother's proposal. Knowing he shouldn't

but really wanting to, Stephen undid his jeans, and hooked his briefs

under his ballsac. He looked over at his big brother, who already had

his own jeans and briefs down round his knees.

"You gotta get comfortable, let it all hang out man" said James,

grabbing Stephen's jeans and underwear and yanking them all the way

down to his ankles; causing Stephen to let out a nervous squeal.

As James stood up again, Stephen caught sight of his brother's rapidly

hardening pole....

"My god!!! How big is it?" Stephen whispered.

"Between 7.5 and 8 inches" James said rather smugly. "Why? How big's


"Just on 5 inches this morning" replied Stephen showing off his uncut

cock while openly staring at his big brother's cut monster.

"Heh heh... so you measure it every morning too huh?" grinned James.

Stephen grinned sheepishly and replied "Yep".

James reached out and took hold of Stephen's cock, peeling back the

foreskin. Stephen reached for James' thick cock, wrapping his hand

round it, feeling the warmth.

"I wonder why you're crcumcised and I'm not?" Stephen thought aloud,

as he started gently stroking his big brother's cock.

"Yeah it is a little wierd huh. I would've thought they'd do both of

us" replied James, as he gently stroked Stephen's cock, making short

little strokes, that barely exposed the tip of his cock inside the

floppy foreskin.

"You can peel it right back you know" Stephen instructed his brother.

"Eh? doesn't it hurt" questioned James.

Stephen wrapped his hand around his brothers hand and guided it through

the motions on his cock; peeling his foreskin right back, exposing the

dark purple head glistening with precum; and then pushing it right

forward again. After a couple of strokes James got the idea, and

started making long strokes.

"Yeaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh..." Stephen groaned, enjoying the feelings of

having his foreskin pop over the back of his widely flaring cockhead.

His own strokes on his brother's pole lengthened.

"Oooooooohhhhh...." gently man, us circumcised guys don't have that

much movement.

"Gulp, sorry....." whispered Stephen, adjusting his stroke. "...so how

long have you been doing this with Andrew?" he asked his big brother.

"Since we were 13 at high school together" James boasted - they had

actually been nearly 15 the first time.

"So do you wank off with any of your mates?" James asked; hoping to

further entrap Stephen into silence about his and Andrew's wank

sessions. He rubbed his thumb across Stephen's exposed sensitive cock

head, smearing the lubricating precum around.

"Uuuuuuuuuuunggggggggghhhhhhhhh..........do that again......." Stephen


"That really turned you on didn't it", James grinned, smearing another

gob of precum around inside his younger brother's foreskin.

"Ooooooohhhhhh fuck........that feels so good" Stephen grunted, as a

shiver went up his spine. Stephen imitated his brother, rubbing his

thumb across his brother's cock head smearing the precum. While

James enjoyed the sensation, it didn't make him squirm the way it did

on Stephen's super sensitive uncut cock.

"Yeah it is kinda nice.....so do you?"

"Do I what?" asked Stephen reveling in the stimulation he was


"You know, wank off with any of your mates?" asked James.

"Uhhhh......no....." mumbled Stephen, not wanting to appear uncool, but

not wanting to lie either.

"Ohh....I thought you and David would be doing it every day" said

James giving Stephen's cock head another thumb rub.

"Unnnnnnngggghhhhhhhhhhhhhh........ooooooo fuck that's good......"

Stephen grunted "Why do you ask? Do you and Andrew do it every day?" he

asked wanting to divert James' attention from his friend David.

"Yeah most days. This really turns you on doesn't it?" James grinned,

repeatedly rubbing Stephen's cock head with his thumb.

"Ohhhh fuck yesssss...." grunted Stephen; he couldn't hold back from

the concerted onslaught he was receiving from his brother's thumb. He

started squirming, his hips were thrusting his cock through his

brother's hand.

"Ohhhh fuck....don't stop now.....I'm gonna cummmmmmm....he grunted"

Stephen's own hand had stopped stroking James' cock, he was squeezing

it far too hard, as he concentrated on thrusting his own cock in and out

of his brother's grip. James managed to peel his brother's fingers

off his cock.

"Yeah .... come on little bro' shoot your load...." he breathed into

Stephen's ear.

Stephen wrapped his arms around his big brother's chest, steadying

himself as he shoved his hips forward in one last thrust.


fuck......" he squealed as his cock erupted spraying gobs of goo onto

the dining room table.

"Yeah that's it....squirt your gooo.....spray it around" grunted

James as he released Stephen's cock and started pounding on his own


As his grunting and squealing subsided, Stephen grabbed hold of his own

cock and slowly stroked his foreskin back and forth, milking the last

of his load over his fingers and onto the dining room floor.

Ten seconds later, James felt that familiar churning in his balls he

turned away from Stephen and aimed at the dining table.

"I bet I can shoot further than you" he grunted "ooooohhhhhh fuck

here it comes"

"No contest, you're shooting from much higher than me" replied Stephen,

staring at his brother's furiously wanking hand, which suddenly stopped.

James thrust his hips forward and let fly.

"Uuuuuuuuunnnnngggghh.......Unnngggghhhh......" he grunted as his hips

thrust forward propelling great volleys of goo 8 inches further down

the dining table"

"See, told you so", he grinned at Stephen.

"Told you it was no contest".

Relaxed in their post orgasmic glow, the boys grinned at each other.

"I told you it was fun", said James.

"Yeah, you were right about that" Stephen replied, not knowing what

else to say.

The two boys reached down and pulled up their underwear, wiping their

slimy cocks on their underwear before tucking them away inside.

The two boys pulled their jeans up, and wiped the evidence of their

afternoon activities from the dining table.

"We should do it again some time", James said, staring Stephen in the


"Yeah, whenever you like", Stephen replied.

* * * * *

Later that evening, Stephen was lying in bed reading another Robert

A. Heinlein book when James stuck his head around the door.

"Hi.....busy?" he asked.

"Nope...just reading this" Stephen replied showing off the cover of his


"Ohhhh......I thought you might be uhhhhhh......you know......" James

grinned nervously.

"Up for another wank?", Stephen finished his brother's question with a

grin, as he pulled back his bed covers, exposing his naked body - he'd

been sleeping nude since he started masturbating regularly the

previous year.

James closed the door and ran over to the bed, he stood there wearing

only a pair of running shorts; he was staring at his younger brother

while kneading the bulge in his shorts.

"Well one of us is over dressed...." Stephen said taking his soft but

growing member in his hand and gently tugging on it.

James bent over and pulled his shorts off, giving Stephen a view of

his fine athletic body and tight ass. Stephen managed to stifle a gasp,

as James stood up showing off his powerful athletic figure. Stephen

found the sight of his brother's tight ass and 7.5 inch cock waving in

the breeze was a big turn on. But he somehow knew that too much

appreciation would ruin everything.

Stephen reached for his brother's pole, wrapped his hand around it and

started gently stroking.

James took Stephen's soft cock and held it genteely between thumb &

forefinger cocking his little finger. Stephen muffled a giggle.

"What?" asked James

"You're holding my cock the same way grandma holds her teacup" Stephen


"Well what's so funny about that?"

"I was wondering if she held grandpa's cock the same way"

The two boys giggled and got to work; James' giant pole was leaking

precum and Stephen's rapidly rose to full hardness under his brother's


Stephen smeared his fingers across James' cock head getting them all

sticky; he was somewhat disappointed, he'd thought it would really

turn his big brother on the way it did for him.

"Your cock's nowhere near as sensitive as mine" he observed,

"You mean I didn't go crazy like this:" James grinned as he stuck his

thumb up inside Stephen's foreskin smearing the goo around.

"Uunnnnnnnnghhhhhhhhh........." Stephen squealed, he still couldn't

control his changing voice " uhhh...yeah like that".

"Well it looks like you got the sensitivity and I got the size" James

sounded smug.

"Well that's for sure. You're way bigger than anyone in my class"

Stephen gulped and went bright red.

"So you like to peek at P E do ya?" James asked

"Uh...yeah...." Stephen admitted "...I've seen a couple of them half

hard. Do you peek?" he asked his brother.

"Yeah .... I think most guys do.....don't let them catch you staring


"Too late, they did"

"Ohh god.....what happened?"

"Last week, I was trying to hide my half-hard on, and ended up staring right

at David's cock, it's quite a nice one too"

"Your nerdy friend David with the bottle bottom glasses?"


"What's nice about it?"

"He's uncircumcised like me...we're the only two in the class...so

there I was staring at his cock, thinking 'that's a nice cock he's

got', when... "

Stephen went on to tell the story of the two class geeks being singled

out for humiliation, being taunted for being terrible at anything

remotely athletic and singled out from the rest of the class by their

uncircumcised cocks.

"....luckily the P E Teacher came in and told everyone to hurry up and

get dressed, before the words and taunts turned to fists".

"I knew you had it tough, wearing glasses, reading all those books and

being a computer geek and all, but I didn't think it was that bad"

James commiserated. The two brothers had long ago let go of their

cocks, and just sat there naked on the bed, while Stephen shared the

reality of his life at school. James wrapped his arm around Stephen's

shoulders and held him close to his chest.

With this little touch of kindness Stephen's resolve broke and the

tears started to run down his face.

"...and the worst thing is that the bastards now refer to David and I

as 'Floppy End' and 'Double Floppy'.... "

James pulled Stephen into a proper hug, the two naked boys clung to

each other as Stephen's tears flowed. Through his tears, with much

hesitation and sniffing, Stephen told of the final indignity...

"....and then the next day in Maths class....that bastard Paul

Williamson....told Miss Anderson, that I was now to be known as Floppy

End and David was Double Floppy"

"Oh no!!!! .... what happened" James asked.

"I got all embarrassed and went bright red, and then Paul said 'Look

at Floppy End he's gonna cry'.....I got so angry I didn't care any

more and went over to Paul and smashed him one right in the face"

"What?!?!? You punched him out? Right there? In Miss Anderson's

class?", James asked in wonder?

"Yeah.....sprayed blood all over the place, probably broke his nose",

Stephen grinned.

"Good one bro - he deserved it - What did Anderson do? I bet she

freaked out"

"Pretty much. She got Paul's thug mates to take him to sick bay and

dragged me out into the corridor where she demanded to know what the

hell had just happened in her classroom. She was really angry, I

thought she was going get me expelled or at least suspended for a


"So what did you tell her?"

"That they were calling us names and I had had enough so I'd punched

Paul out. Then she wanted to know the significance of the names

'Floppy End' and 'Double Floppy'. I got all embarrassed again and just

stood there and stared at her. God I couldn't tell her why they call

me that!"

"Hell no! So what did she do?"

"Eventually she made me tell her; I said that it came from the

changing room at the gym, and was kind of embarrassing. She muttered

something about cruel boys, and left it at that. But then she went on

and on about no provocation excusing violence. Eventually she said she

wasn't going to tell the Headmaster, even though she should, because

she knew it wasn't in my nature, but that I had to behave myself in


"So you punched that dick Paul's nose right in front of Miss Anderson,

and she didn't even tell the Headmaster?"

"Yeah I guess that's about it." Stephen said as he pulled out of his

brother's hug.

"Hmmmmff....she must've felt sorry for you. Hell I even feel sorry for


"Yeah well she is quite nice .... for a teacher that is" said Stephen

smiling and getting embarassed again.

"And she sure is good looking..." James whispered thinking of the

pretty, 24 year old maths teacher, who had started at their conservative,

uniformed boys-only high school at the beginning of the term.

"Yeah....I bet the whole school wanks themselves silly dreaming of


"Not the whole school...." James said rather cryptically. He took

hold of Stephen's now soft cock and played with his quarter inch of

floppy foreskin. "....I get how they got Floppy End for you, but why

did they christen David Double Floppy?"

Stephen smiled weakly, "David's got a floppy foreskin like me, and also

really low hanging balls, they thought it was clever as well as


The two naked boys sat side by side looking at each other for a moment

when Stephen reached over and grabbed a hold of James' soft

cock. "Look at this." he said, "You came in here wanting a wank, and

got the tale of my tragic life at school instead".

"That's alright", James grinned. "I'll survive, maybe tomorrow


"Yeah tomorrow night,", Stephen smiled at his brother who had been

understanding and shown compassion for the first time in his young

life. "and thanks for understanding".

* * * * *

The next afternoon while Stephen was taking his turn at preparing

dinner James came in from hockey practice.

"Hey....how'd practice go?" he asked him brightly. In truth, he

felt much better for having told his older brother what had happened

at school.

"Not bad little geek....I told Mike Williamson to let his brother

know, that I'd give him a pair of black eyes to match the broken nose

if you got any more trouble from him"

"You didn't tell him...." Stephen started in horror.

"Relax, I didn't tell him exactly what Paul had done to deserve the

broken nose, just that there was a pair of black eyes waiting for his


"What did Mike say?", stammered Stephen.

"He said that you won't get any more trouble from Paul."

"I sure hope so, he's been pretty nasty to David & I since I broke his

nose, continually referring to us as Floppy End and Double Floppy".

"Don't you worry, Mike will make sure Paul leaves you alone. Now, I'd

better hit the shower, I've got a hot date tonight, and I don't want

to be all sweaty for it"

Stephen's face fell, "You're going out? I thought we were going

to....uhhhh....you know.....". Stephen had been looking forward to

their delayed wank session that night. Indeed, he'd refrained from

his usual morning & after school wank sessions, in preparation for


"Relax," James laughed, "you're my hot date." James winked and

clutched his groin as he headed for the bathroom.

At bed time, Stephen lay naked on top of his bed staring at his raging

hard cock, he had his foreskin peeled back behind the head, making it

look like he had been circumcised. He was flexing his groin muscles,

enjoying watching his cock wave about. Just as he was about to take

his cock in hand and furiously wank himself off, James came in and

closed the door. He was naked and his massive hardon lead the way

over to Stephen's bed.

"Ready and waiting I see" James whispered.

Stephen didn't reply he just stared at the adonis that was standing in

front of him. "God I wish i was half-way as good looking as him,"

he thought "and not just the scrawny geek that I am". Stephen went

to sit up on the side of his bed, but James pushed him back down.

"Just lay back and enjoy" James whispered as he took hold of his

younger brother's cock in his genteel thumb and forefinger grip.

Stephen giggled at the sight of it.

"So do you reckon she does?" he asked his big brother.

"What?.....oh grandma?.......I reckon so" replied James as he popped

Stephen's foreskin back over the deep purple head, rubbed the palm of

his hand down the shaft and started kneading his brother's tight ball


"Ohhhh god......that's nice" Stephen grunted. James grinned and ran

his hand back up the shaft.

"I bet this is nicer" he whispered as he peeled back the foreskin a

little, grazing his thumb across the piss slit trying to coax a gob of

lubricating precum from his brother's cock.

"Unnnnggggghhhhh......yesssssss........do it again" Stephen grunted as

his hips gave an involuntary thrust. James was enjoying watching his

brother squirm and squeal with the pleasure he was receiving; so he

did it twice more, smearing the precum that was oozing out of his

brother's cock all over the super sensitive head.

"Unnnnngggghhhhhhhhhhh..........ooooooooooooooo fuck!!!" Stephen

grabbed hold of his bedhead as his hips started thrusting, he wasn't

far off now. He desperately wanted to grab hold of his cock and

furiously wank himself to completion, but James slapped his brother's

scrabbling clasping hands away.

"No!!!! "

"I'm in charge here!!! "

"Just enjoy the sensations little geek!!!" He grunted, his own cock

was leaking cum, James enjoyed being in control. Stephen desperately

needed release, if he couldn't take over and wank himself, he could

help bring on his own orgasm; He reached up and grabbed a hold of his

left nipple, twisting and pulling on it.

"Unnnnnnnggghhhhhhhhhhh" he grunted as he switched to the right nipple

and twisted it just as viciously. Realising his brother was getting

close, James sped up his stroking, peeling his brother's foreskin

back and forth as fast as he could. The boys were grunting and

breathing hard, Stephen's hips were thrusting, as he alternately

pinched & twisted his nipples, willing himself to spew his load.

"Come on little geek, shoot your load" James grunted into Stephen's

ear, "Yeah, spew your goo". By chance James had Stephen's foreskin

pulled all the way back, exposing the purple glistening head as Stephen

started to fire volleys of thick creamy goo into the air.

"Unnnngggghhhhhhhh........" he grunted as the first shot of cum landed

plop on his chin and chest. James grinned and aimed his brother's

cock on a higher trajectory as the second and third shots landed on

Stephen's cheeks and chin.

In the midst of his orgasm Stephen's cock head had become even more

sensitive, he couldn't stand the feeling of his foreskin being stroked

back & forth over his cockhead. He managed to wriggle out of James'

grip and held his own cock as it subsided, spewing a stream of thick

white cream down the sides of his shaft and over his fingers.

Meanwhile James had been very turned on by the sight & sound of his

brother's orgasm. He grabbed hold of his own pole and started stroking

furiously, he grabbed his balls in his other hand and massaged them.

"Oooooohhhhhh fuck....I'm gonna shoot" he grunted, standing up his

hips gyrating and thrusting; his own orgasm was close.

"Uuuuuunnnnnngggggghhhhhh ..... here it comes" he grunted.

Stephen watched transfixed as his brother's big pole started spewing

it's own load of goo, he felt it land splat on his chest and stomach;

a couple of ropes spewed across the hand holding his still hard


James was totally turned on watching his load of goo spew all over

his younger brother.

"Oooohhhh fuucccckkkkk yeeeeaaaahhhh....take my load" he grunted as

Stephen started licking his hand clean, enjoying the combined taste of

his own and James' thick cream.

"Ewwwwww...did you just lick up that goo" James asked.

"Yeah...it's nice." replied Stephen "I always lick it up."

"Gross man" James replied staring at Stephen somewhat in horror.

"Not really....love the taste. Here I've saved you some" Stephen held

his cum covered finger under his brother's nose.

"Ummmmm....I don't think so" James turned his head away.

"Suit yourself," Stephen smacked his lips as he scooped up the goo on

his body and slurped it down "hmmmmmm delicious!!!"

"Like I said: Ewww..... gross" James said as he made to leave the


* * * * *

Over the following months, the brothers masturbated together 2 or 3

times a week. Their sessions fell into a regular pattern: James would

sneak into Stephen's bedroom; and the two boys would sit side by side

on the edge of the bed, stroking each other's cock. James would

control Stephen's orgasm, slapping Stephen's hands away from his

sensitive nipples, grazing his thumb under Stephen's foreskin; making

Stephen wait for release made James hornier than ever.

Their sessions invariably ended with Stephen covered in ropes of cum

from both cocks. He would lie in the after glow of his orgasm,

scooping it up and slurping it down; savouring the slimey, salty

taste of his own and his brother's cum.

James was slightly disgusted by the thought of Stephen slurping down

their combined loads; but the act of spraying his goo all over Stephen

turned James on mightily. He would masturbate most mornings

savouring the memory of his cock pumping ropes of cum all over his


Stephen's morning, masturbatory fantasies alternated between occasional

sightings of his friend David's cock and low hanging balls at the

school gym, and his big brother's cock spewing goo all over him. He

wanted to suck on James' cock, he'd read all about blowjobs and

cocksucking in the letters in their Dad's porno magazines; but he

wasn't sure how James would react.

Contributing to Stephen's frustration, David was a frequent visitor to

his home after school. Usually they would fool around on the family

computer each contributing equally to some programme they were writing

together. But sometimes, particularly when Stephen's dad had just got a

new porn magazine, the two boys would sit side by side, heads

touching, turning the pages on the latest porn magazine available.

They would look at the pictures, they'd silently read the sex letters

together. Occasionally one would touch the other's hand asking him not

to turn the page just yet. They would both rub the bulges in their

pants, grinning at each other; each half-wanting to challenge the

other to take it out and wank off properly. But nothing ever

happened, the magazine would be put away, and the pair of geeks would

adjourn to the dining room for another session on their latest

software creation.

Later in the year, James left school, and started working at the

telephone company. He and his friend Andrew were making plans to share

a house together; time was running out for Stephen to make his most

vivid morning masturbatory fantasy a reality.

On his final night at home, James came into Stephen's room, wearing

his usual pair of tented running shorts. "Up for one last wank?" he


Stephen knelt infront of his big brother, and replied "Sure thing. Here

let me help you out of these" Stephen had his hands rubbing across

James' muscular ass cheeks, pulling down his running shorts.

"You've grown a bit in the last year; how big is it now?"

"8.5in...and you're not looking too foul yourself"

"6.5in as of this morning" replied Stephen, screwing up his courage for

what was to come next.

Once he'd freed James from his running shorts, Stephen took James'

cock in both hands, and thought "Well, here goes" as he stuck out

his tongue and gave James' cock head a couple of licks.

James grabbed Stephen's head in both hands, and yanked him away from

his cock. "What the fuck are you doing?" he demanded as he threw

Stephen into a heap on the floor.

Stephen didn't reply. He stared wordlessly at James' face; the

violence of his big brother's reaction had scared him deeply.

"You were going to suck on my cock weren't you?"

Stephen nodded, seriously scared.

"That's disgusting....I thought you were a bit wierd watching the way

you scoop our cum up and lick it off your hand, but I didn't think you

were a cocksucking poofter. Is that what you are? A cocksucker? A


"No I'm not" Stephen whispered; the venom in James' voice had

Stephen truely scared, he just wanted him to leave.

"Yes you are!!" James' anger rose. "You were licking at my cock, you

wanted to suck on it, didn't you? You're a queer little homo

cocksucking poofter aren't you little brother?"

"N n n n No I'm not" Stephen stammered, "I've never sucked a cock

before; I just wanted to taste yours"

"Listen to him: my queer poofter homo little brother isn't a

cocksucker, he just wanted to taste it" James taunted. "I suppose the

next thing you wanted to 'just try' was to take my cock up your arse?"

James clenched his fists, making ready to punch Stephen.

Stephen struggled to hold back the tears. "N n n no I'm not" he

repeated, scuttling into the corner, trying to get as far away as

possible from the monster in his bedroom.

"You're disgusting, that's what you are"

"No more disgusting than you coming in here night after night to wank

and molest me for all those months" Stephen replied from the safety of

the other side of the room.

"Guys wanking off together is cool, sucking cock and taking it up the

arse is queer homo shit." James paused staring in horror at his

brother. "I'm glad I'm moving out tomorrow, I'll be away from

cocksucking homos like you"

Stephen knelt in the corner staring at James, and started smiling; he

didn't know how he knew it, but he was quite sure that Andrew,

James' soon to be housemate, was a genuine 'cocksucking homo

poofter'; James was in for a real surprise at some stage.

"What are you smiling at poofter?" James asked harshly.

"Nothing." Stephen replied, wiping the smile from his face.

"Well you just fucking stay away from me poofter" snarled James between

his clenched teeth, as he snatched up his discarded running shorts and


Once James had left, Stephen threw himself on his bed, put the light

out and buried his head under the blankets. The tears he'd been

holding back started to flow:

"I'm not a cocksucker. I'm not! I just wanted to try it. That doesn't

make me a queer homo poofter" he repeated to himself.

"I'm not! I'm not! I'm not!!" he sniffled as he finally drifted off

to sleep.

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Hi Stuey, welcome! This is a first try? It's very good. A nice, natural, unforced writing style and a good storyline so far.

My take on your questions (no doubt others will have something to say too):

Don't compromise your NZ English - it gives additional flavour and interest to your story. In this global community most people can pick up regional variations in English and if they can't they'll ask. They'll be intrigued, not put off your story. I write Brit English and I get readers writing to say how much they like my Britishisms. Only once can I ever remember writing something explanatory for an American audience - I wrote about a CV, and put in a comment that it would be known as a resum? in the US.

The ending of chapter 1 is enough to make the reader want to know what happens next, but not enough to make him squirm and go 'AARRGH - Don't stop there!'. Personally I want to know what happens next between Stephen and David more than I want to know what happens between Stephen and James, but I'll have to be patient. You ARE going to post subsequent chapters here, aren't you?

As for the sex, it's a story about sex, you can hardly leave it out. Whether the amount is appropriate here at AwesomeDude I'll leave for others to comment on. You have to understand we're very sensitive - delicate consititutions, you know. If you could see us, we're all sat around in the drawing room, maiden ladies in twin set and pearls, sipping tea together out of the best Wedgwood, our little fingers pointed outwards, and discussing last Sunday's sermon. So you have to make allowances for us!

I really enjoyed reading this and look forward to more.


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Yes, like little maiden aunties we are, all sitting and holding our...er...teacups! Yes, our teacups, in a grip that is amazing like how we hold...well, you get the picture.

Love the NZ-isms. keep 'em!

Too much sex? Is there anything else, really? a momentary pause to explore some other issue - bullying in school - and then right back at it. Nothing wrong with that, of course...except in the disingenuousness of the question. The story, thus far, is about sex between two brothers. However, I have a feeling that it will not be limited to that topic fairly soon, and the characters are sturdy enough to manage a transition to a story going just about anywhere you want it to go.



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There are many stories on AD that are heavy on sex, so there it really no reason to ask the question.

Stories by Josh and Douglas come to mine. They don't skimp on sexual detail, yet are superbly written.

As always, sex is just one facet of a story. It isn't how little or how much is there that makes or breaks the story, but how well it's written, and how well it fits into the story. What's there should make the story better. That's what's important.


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Thanks for the nice comments guys.

This is my first go at any kind of fiction writing. I do plenty of technical writing in my work as a Software & Data Architect, and in a way good technical writing is no different from fiction: It's gotta have something to say, and hold the readers' interest.

RE: Future story line - You already know that big brother James is moving out and that this is Stephen's story. Of course Stephen is gay, but he has to figure that out for himself - and then there's so many ways to express being gay.

RE: little old grandmas sitting in the parlour sipping tea from their wedgewood - you obviously didn't have a collection of grandmas & great-aunts like I did !!!! They may've done their fair share of tea sipping from wedgewood - but the conversation wasn't *ALWAYS* about the sermon.

Hopefully you'll all be able to read Stephen's story sometime soon.

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