Kapitano Posted December 22, 2008 Report Share Posted December 22, 2008 He introduced me to his new boyfriend. At first I thought I wanted to take his new man away from him. The man was young and handsome, and they obviously wouldn't have lasted long anyway. Then I thought I just wanted to break them up. It wasn't fair that he had someone and I didn't. It wasn't fair that he was happy. Then I thought I just wanted to make him suffer. I wanted to take away the thing which made him happy, just like he'd taken away the thing which had made me happy - himself. Then I realised I didn't want to hurt him at all, because I still loved him. After a slight hesitation, I shook the new boyfriend's hand. Link to comment
Cole Parker Posted December 22, 2008 Report Share Posted December 22, 2008 Very good, Kapitano. I love that sort of condensed, terse writing where a world of thoughts and emotions are contained in very few words. C Link to comment
Bruin Fisher Posted December 22, 2008 Report Share Posted December 22, 2008 Splendid, Kapitano. So much story in so few words. Link to comment
Tanuki Racoon Posted December 22, 2008 Report Share Posted December 22, 2008 I like it. Short, concise. Everything one of my editors tells me I shouldn't do :) I like it -- wide range of emotions in a short space. Link to comment
Camy Posted December 24, 2008 Report Share Posted December 24, 2008 Bravo, Kapitano. Another excellent flash from your pen. As Bruin said 'So much story in so few words.' More, please! Camy Link to comment
Trab Posted December 24, 2008 Report Share Posted December 24, 2008 Excellent indeed. BTW, Camy, I don't know if you were trying for it, but your comment immediately evoked a twisted thought of "flash in the pen". Link to comment
Steven Keiths Posted December 25, 2008 Report Share Posted December 25, 2008 Very nice, very vivid. Link to comment
ChrisR Posted January 16, 2016 Report Share Posted January 16, 2016 I enjoyed the story and suddenly I understood the title. Link to comment
larkin Posted January 22, 2016 Report Share Posted January 22, 2016 For one that likes short stories this more than fills the bill. It is like a haiku. In each line is a separate story, a painful recollection and longing for love lost. God damn you! Link to comment
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