Kapitano Posted January 16, 2010 Report Share Posted January 16, 2010 I wanted him so much. And somehow, I got him. The first time I caught him in a lie it didn't matter. Then there were more lies, and more. He kept borrowing money from me, always promising to pay it back, but when he had money, he never did. I told myself he would, eventually. The stories he told his friends about me, about dumb things I'd never done and clever things he'd never said. It's been over a year, and every time I tried to tell him I wasn't happy, he told me I was imagining it. And I thought maybe I was. He was so sure. I've been sitting here and waiting for an hour, trying not to psyche myself up, trying not to work up the nerve, in case it fails me when... My mobile rings. It's his number, and I wait for three rings before answering. "Hello?" "Hi. You want to come over for some fun?" "Never call me again." I hang up before he can reply. Then I stare at the phone for a full minute, waiting again. It rings again, and his number flashes up. Suddenly I realise I'm breathing hard. I push the button to end the call. There. Easy. Link to comment
Cole Parker Posted January 16, 2010 Report Share Posted January 16, 2010 You've written emotions that jump right off the page! Powerful stuff! C Link to comment
Trab Posted January 16, 2010 Report Share Posted January 16, 2010 Do I even dare suggest Staples might want royalty payments on the Easy Button aspect? Nicely done! Link to comment
Merkin Posted January 16, 2010 Report Share Posted January 16, 2010 Terrific. The twist you've given the word from your title to the ending is inspired. James Link to comment
DesDownunder Posted January 16, 2010 Report Share Posted January 16, 2010 Masterful in more ways than one. Link to comment
Grant Bentley Posted January 16, 2010 Report Share Posted January 16, 2010 One can feel the emotions as they read. Very well done! Link to comment
JamesSavik Posted January 16, 2010 Report Share Posted January 16, 2010 In my experience, the situation is anything but easy. Link to comment
TracyMN Posted February 3, 2010 Report Share Posted February 3, 2010 Loved it, in the only way one can love such things--in hindsight and with a knot in the gut. An excellent display of flash genius, I'm thinking. Thanks. Tracy Link to comment
Camy Posted February 12, 2010 Report Share Posted February 12, 2010 I can't believe I've missed this for so long. Oh, well, it's probably due to an extended stay in la-la land. Just what good flash should be: not a word too many and emotive as hell - which is definitely not 'Easy.' Excellent, Kapitano! Link to comment
Steven Keiths Posted February 23, 2010 Report Share Posted February 23, 2010 Breaking the hold of limerence; I agree, not easy. Nicely told Kap. Link to comment
Tanuki Racoon Posted February 23, 2010 Report Share Posted February 23, 2010 Niicely told, I agree. Sadly there are millions of "relationships" just like this. Link to comment
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