Nigel Gordon Posted December 3, 2014 Report Share Posted December 3, 2014 There are times when the first few lines of a story grab you and hold you, like the opening lines of Mary Renault's 'The Charioteer'. Before you read anything else, from those opening lines alone you know it is going to be a good read. Unfortunately it is not often that happens but fortunately Dabeagle has done it in 'Life in a Northern Town'. From the very start the words grab you making the atmosphere of the situation a reality that you want to explore and one you will want to keep on exploring. This first chapter has got hold of me, I can't wait to read the rest. You can find it here: http://www.awesomedude.com/dabeagle/life-in-a-northern-town/life-in-a-northern-town-01.htm Quote Link to comment
Lugnutz Posted December 3, 2014 Report Share Posted December 3, 2014 I've read it elsewhere. How he calls it substandard, I don't know. I like it. It's tense too. Quote Link to comment
JamesSavik Posted December 3, 2014 Report Share Posted December 3, 2014 I like Nick already. Southern kid surrounded by yankees. Poor guy. Quote Link to comment
Guest Dabeagle Posted December 3, 2014 Report Share Posted December 3, 2014 I know all the things people say about the creator being hardest on the work, but... This was, I think, the third story I ever started and the first I didn't finish. It languished for nearly 15 years. One of the chief complaints was the florid opening monologue. I only finished it because Graeme and Merkin asked. Then, Cole made his fateful mistake. He said to me, something on the order of, 'is this in present or past tense? you have both'. Me, unthinking, said - well, it all happens now so...present I guess. The original files from 2000 were revamped, errors in the plot and changing characters names were solved. The problem was that many of the characters were modeled on real people. A few of the side stories are true, the house is one I'd wanted to use in a story (the group home) and is an actual photo I took. Chapter 8 was started and incomplete from 2003, chapters 9 and 10 are all new. My thanks to Cole for being who he is through this story. I hope you don't hate it as much as I do - and in chapter ten, Pat Benetar forgive - but bonus points if you spot it. Quote Link to comment
Rutabaga Posted December 3, 2014 Report Share Posted December 3, 2014 I did notice some present and past tense but wasn't going to say anything. ? R Quote Link to comment
Graeme Posted December 4, 2014 Report Share Posted December 4, 2014 I'm not that critical. I just enjoy a well told story Quote Link to comment
Rutabaga Posted December 6, 2014 Report Share Posted December 6, 2014 Wow. Good grief. R Quote Link to comment
JamesSavik Posted December 6, 2014 Report Share Posted December 6, 2014 Adam's mother. That screaming thing she did at the end of the chapter gave me a cold sweat. Damn. Quote Link to comment
JamesSavik Posted December 7, 2014 Report Share Posted December 7, 2014 OK- I love the story and went to hunt it down. The only spoiler you'll get from me is that you'll love it. Quote Link to comment
Paul Wren Posted December 7, 2014 Report Share Posted December 7, 2014 Can't wait to see where this is going to go, may have to go out hunting for it elsewhere. Quote Link to comment
colinian Posted December 8, 2014 Report Share Posted December 8, 2014 I'm eagerly awaiting chapter 3. Colin Quote Link to comment
Rutabaga Posted December 10, 2014 Report Share Posted December 10, 2014 “It wouldn’t hurt for you to reign in your language either.” Now there's an understatement. :-) R Quote Link to comment
Rutabaga Posted December 13, 2014 Report Share Posted December 13, 2014 I'm beginning to get an inkling of why this story may have been hard to finish, but I'm still very intrigued by what's going on so far. R Quote Link to comment
Hoskins Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 "Boys are always up to something. It's axiomatic." -- Osmond (Nice call out, 10/10) As the sky turns BLACK and ugly white worms pop from Richard's exposed arm... Quote Link to comment
colinian Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 A wonderful story. It's like a great meal. Every bite is there to be savored. Colin Quote Link to comment
Guest Dabeagle Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 "Boys are always up to something. It's axiomatic." -- Osmond (Nice call out, 10/10) As the sky turns BLACK and ugly white worms pop from Richard's exposed arm... I'm unfamiliar with the quote. I got it from when I used to be a big Stephen King fan and read one of his best works, in my opinion, The Talisman. In it there is a character that says something similar about boys, I think that they are bad and refers to it being axiomatic. As a teen I didn't know what the word meant - so I looked it up and it has stuck ever since. Quote Link to comment
Camy Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 I'm unfamiliar with the quote. I got it from when I used to be a big Stephen King fan and read one of his best works, in my opinion, The Talisman. In it there is a character that says something similar about boys, I think that they are bad and refers to it being axiomatic. As a teen I didn't know what the word meant - so I looked it up and it has stuck ever since. The quote is from The Talisman. Osmond as Sunlight Gardener, running his home for wayward boys (shudder). Quote Link to comment
Rutabaga Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 Possible but unlikely spoilers below. I'm a bit confused by Adam's reaction to the statement that is quoted to him at the very end of this chapter. While I guess I can see the basis for what he does, insofar as it involves the other two people in question, it seems to me that another far more direct response would have been more plausible and appropriate insofar as the statement involves the future of Adam personally. Unfortunately I don't know how to phrase this more clearly without crossing the spoiler line. Am I missing something? R Quote Link to comment
Guest Dabeagle Posted December 18, 2014 Report Share Posted December 18, 2014 The quote is from The Talisman. Osmond as Sunlight Gardener, running his home for wayward boys (shudder). Oh, I'd forgotten the mans' name. Quote Link to comment
Guest Dabeagle Posted December 18, 2014 Report Share Posted December 18, 2014 Possible but unlikely spoilers below. I'm a bit confused by Adam's reaction to the statement that is quoted to him at the very end of this chapter. While I guess I can see the basis for what he does, insofar as it involves the other two people in question, it seems to me that another far more direct response would have been more plausible and appropriate insofar as the statement involves the future of Adam personally. Unfortunately I don't know how to phrase this more clearly without crossing the spoiler line. Am I missing something? R I can't even figure out what you mean. Send me a PM. Quote Link to comment
Rutabaga Posted December 18, 2014 Report Share Posted December 18, 2014 I can't even figure out what you mean. Send me a PM. On its way. And I guess the spoiler danger was minimal! R Quote Link to comment
Rutabaga Posted December 31, 2014 Report Share Posted December 31, 2014 Fuck a duck, could this night get any worse? Yep, that pretty well sums up Chapter 9. Yes sir. R Quote Link to comment
Guest Dabeagle Posted January 11, 2015 Report Share Posted January 11, 2015 So I have to ask - did the last chapter just destroy this for you? There was a steady commentary until that last one hit and then - crickets. Quote Link to comment
Rutabaga Posted January 11, 2015 Report Share Posted January 11, 2015 I never know what to say in the balance between meaningful commentary and unwanted spoilers. SO anyone worried about spoilers should stop here. I was pleased by the number of breaks that suddenly seemed to go Adam's way. It was certainly high time. It was never exactly clear to me why Joe and Scott were dealt with as they were, although it's not really critical to the story. Maybe I missed something earlier about the relevant ground rules for that home. Overall, my only reaction is that the last chapter seemed to me to telescope two or three chapters' worth of resolution into one. In other words, in the pacing of the story, it was a bit of a surprise for things to sort themselves out as quickly as they did in that last chapter, and without more struggle on Adam's part. I guess when I read the last line in chapter 9 I was expecting more peril facing Adam than there turned out to be. Hope that makes at least a bit of sense. R Quote Link to comment
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