Boy, Bus & Key By DaBeagle

[Lugnutz]

A long single read by Beagle but well worth it. Take a guy that's very self concious, add a very outspoken cousin and a few of her friends and everything gets turned upside down.

You did good with this story, I applaud you.

You can find it here. http://awesomedude.com/dabeagle/short_stories/boy_bus__key.htm

[Lugnutz]

BTW, this is here after I found the story was also here. Great story, it will change your life.

[Cole Parker]

I think my eyes are playing tricks on me. I was looking at this thread and swear I saw Mike railing at Lug--always a good thing to do, by the way--about not having encouraged people to read Dave's story on this site. Then I went back to see what was what and found Lug had indeed done that, originally. So I went back to the bottom to inform Mike of this, very politely of course, with no teasting or sacrasm beause as everyone knows I never indulge in that, heaven forbid, and, lo and behold, Mike's message isn't there any more!

Ah, to have the ultimate power. Use it wisely, my son, use it wisely.

C

[Lugnutz]

And we got a new phrase out of it. "For the love of donuts."

Beagle is a genius.

[dude]

I deleted nothing!

[Cole Parker]

I guess I was mistaken. But I was sure I saw something that wasn't there when I came back. Perhaps it was in another thread. Or perhaps my eyes are playing tricks on me.

My apologies!

I was kidding about the power and all that.

C

[dude]

I think you've been wandering in and out among the monoliths at Stonehenge, Cole.

[Lugnutz]

See what happens when you drink the bong water?

[Cole Parker]

I've actually seen Stonehenge. It's an awsome sight, coming up all alone in the middle of this vast, empty plane. Gives you a strange feeling.

I thought you were supposed to drink the bong water. No wonder everyone was laughing!

C

[Camy]

Not to completely interrupt a thread that pretends it's about a great new Dabeagle story and then waffles on about Stonehenge and who posts what where and why, but I'd like to say how thoroughly uplifting, nice and heartwarming, 'Boy, Bus & Key' actually is.

'Boy, Bus & Key' is a wonderful read! Bravo Dabeagle!

[Guest Dabeagle]

Thank you for the kind posts, especially those that were actually about the story

Such an easily distracted bunch, I don't know how you guys get anything done with you short span of atte - oh look at the squirrel!

[The Pecman]

Very nice story, Beagle -- well done!

[Chris James]

Yes, a great story about real life or at least how we would like to see it lived...well done Beagle!

[Gee Whillickers]

Well, that was just a fantastic story. Very believable, with fun and well thought out characters, and excellent interactions.

A great story. Thanks for that!

[blue]

Neat story! Milo is a keeper. So's Win. Go, Donny. Thoroughly enjoyed this story.

[colinian]

I liked the story a lot. However, I am disappointed by one thing in the story: It's not continuing as a serial novel!

Colin

[Lugnutz]

I was walking across the parking lot of the ice arena across the street and found a toy helmet and thought of this story. I pocketed the helmet and continued my walk.

[The Pecman]

I liked the story a lot. However, I am disappointed by one thing in the story: It's not continuing as a serial novel!

I agree! And the next chapter must have much more sex in it...

[Paul]

And the next chapter must have much more sex in it...

While it would be interesting to see how he'd continue the story - as he did with Alec/Sasha in the Sanitaria Springs series - I think it works perfectly as a stand-alone. I wouldn't be looking for more sex in it, though.

[Addym Kehris]

While it would be interesting to see how he'd continue the story - as he did with Alec/Sasha in the Sanitaria Springs series - I think it works perfectly as a stand-alone. I wouldn't be looking for more sex in it, though.

Very well said, Paul. I thought Beagle did a tremendous job with this one. His characters were 'real' and 'alive'...and querky. It was easy to love each and every one of them. Very satisfying watching each of them struggling with their demons and how they supported one another. But then, I'm one of those that prefers the stories that deal with 'overcoming' and not the sex.

[Lugnutz]

Amen.

[Guest Dabeagle]

I have no plans to continue this story.

This took a ton of time to come together and went through more iterations than I care to remember. One beta suggested cutting a substantial part, but I chose to keep it becasue I felt it setup Olivers nature and inserted the key to be returned to by story's end. Believe it or not, it took months to finally come together, and it was all base on the picture of the fellow leaning on the stone wall, who I named Milo. It took a long time to build a story for a character to meet him on that wall, but then what? Then there was the other characters, some of whom deserved a storyline, I felt.

The end didn't materialize until I was on a riverboat in Romania, coming up the Danube. I met a couple from Ohio, they were religious and that always makes me wary from two perspectives. One is the loud ones that look down their noses in judgement and the other is from a more social aspect, I guess, being as I'm an athiest and their beliefs make no rational sense to me. Anyway, they were the lovliest people - she was a pastor - and they told me the story about how they got together.

He had been hurt in previous relationships and when he met her, told her he wanted a 'partner in adventure' but nothing serious and she accepted that. So they went out, had fun, but had no formal strings attached. Finally she decided she loved him and told him that she couldn't see him anymore. He, crestfallen, asked why and she explained that she wanted more - she wanted him around all the time, to be her other half. I thought it was a great story, her taking charge and going after he, who was gun shy. So I had my ending, adapted of course.

But, anyway, no. There will be no more, thanks for asking though.

[Merkin]

I love learning how stories come about. Thanks, Dabeagle.

[Jeff Ellis]

I agree with Paul. As a single short story it has an uplifting message... yes I believe it has a message as much as it has a romantic story. Sequels or novella would dilute the message, The innocence of the relationship is part of the message, so I totally agree with Paul

Well done Dabeagle... you done good,

Thank you for a very pleasurable few hours